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18+ Sexual Situations - Look Here Or Ill Kill You
aight now i got ur attention
And there you were lookin for somethin to call my own And there you were my heart sayin sure, my brain sayin dont And there you were morals pressed like luck in my eyes There you are the lies i help you put to demise There we are stuck with borders of glass between us Im sorry Runnin in my mind there is always a "but.." I've lied Ive lied to you, to every one you know Im sorry I have no retreat, theres no where to go I .. I ... Lu-Lu-Lu..fuck it I dont know if you feel this way too I ... I ... Lu.. GOD DAMMIT In my mind i hope and tell my self you do I... .I ...I..cant commit.. But I do love you........ |
That was a tight drop
Concept was madd sick, content was great Wordplay was ill I personally like the last bit the best 8.5/10 Nice drop -OnE LoVe- |
thanx dog.. im peepin urs as we speek
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all i can say is..damn WOW!.....lots of emotions there..
its funny cuz a lot of guys i know are not as emotional as i expected....but fuck...not only u got talent...but u have passion.... wish i have one of those...even just one ya know...but i aint that lucky.... nice piece...i really liked it |
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Nice job on writing this. I liked the style of it. I haven't seen one like this before..
The content was really good. And the way you wrote it was good too..like with the bold letters. "I .. I ... Lu-Lu-Lu..fuck it I dont know if you feel this way too I ... I ... Lu.. GOD DAMMIT In my mind i hope and tell my self you do I... .I ...I..cant commit.. But I do love you........" I thought that was the best part. I laughed when I read it cause I did nearly the same thing and felt like an idiot not being able to get the words out. Good piece.. |
lol, thats str8 dog, i just keyed this up..
i dont ever put mind on poems just heart, and this was from my heart |
I liked how u set this one up............I was feeling what u were saying........
Very interesting........ |
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