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wh1te_ed1ti0n 06-12-03 02:27 PM

|| -scripture of a dead soul- ||
 
I cant help the pain that subsides deep within
So I release and drain my energy with a sin
For now hell is only a dream away
Another place for me to rot day after day
But I pray for a better day as I lay my head to rest
Strap off my vest cross my hands to my chest
Depressed emotions run deep through my veins
Cold metal chains wrap and trap my body squeezing out my remains
As time gets closer I train my brain to remain fluent with fear
So called obstructions are no more than a murmor that I stear clear
Following past mistakes to lead to my dismissal
Im tempted to explode like a missle
cutting through the air with only a wisstle
I escape but Im still caught between real and fake
You offer these pills so i take and awake
to find myself in a state of distress
traped in a nest with no less than the best
but i rest and test the limits of law
i go for a ride on the lyrical sea-saw
ive long fogoten what once was a dream
living large incharge and picture on every magaizne
riding plush in a white streched limozine
with more green than bill gates could have ever dreamed
but with a scream
all this changes rearanges and deranges the perspective



































i leave you with this

one last wish

one last time to forever be missed

this is my last verse as the forgoten solider

no one bolder

noble yet cowardly flowing so smooth yet rough

strong but weak able to fight but not tough

enough of thy flaws no more living by laws

as the claws not jaws of life take me

away.

-mc-appeal 06-12-03 02:57 PM

i thought this was an ill rhyme... and would sound hella dope being rapped to a beat...





but i didnt like the end bar structure....

Dadi Kewl 06-12-03 03:49 PM

Yeah that was some nice stuff White

Keep it up.......

_out

wh1te_ed1ti0n 06-12-03 04:24 PM

thanks....



keep em coming

AC-Satch 06-13-03 04:26 AM

good verse... lol

tRiLL 06-13-03 07:31 AM

that was too simple.........
vocab was weak.........
u need to elivate

AC-Satch 06-13-03 04:21 PM

its funny how everyone says the ''you need to elevate your vocab''


lol, its a prewritten ... mabye he wasnt going for complexity...

D GreE 06-13-03 05:14 PM

decent multies. flowed pretty well for me. enjoyed reading it. Ill look for more


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