My World
 

Innocence has evaporated, society's slapped and stated that evil's reserected, Satan's back inflated
And has cracked and grated us into nothing, molding our debating souls into pure evil, we're trapped and crated
Bowing down to the corporate minds, sellin out for sports and rhymes, resorting to contracts to report our minds
Back to with a court and bind, legally tied up and short a sign that says we goin to be alright, can't abort for time
To escape your brain and other memories, of bein sane and tougher when you was not exposed to the pain and suffer
Of others being Blamed for brothers' mistakes, rained on mothers parades when they sons bein framed for the shuffler
Of the person dealing the cards, stealing your hearts in the midst of chaos and replacin it with unhealing parts
So the kealing starts as your soul dies, no more feelings spark as your unemotional, and it's sealing starts
To shut out the right, now we phase two of life, as we pase through the strife and disgrace you with sights
Of evil, embrace you with new heights of sickness never seen, murder, rape, bodies traced from spite
Cause anger embelishes and soaks into our thoughts, pokes in and stops until we feel the hate, then ropes us and locks
Like we cattle, and shows us the shocks of evil's consequences, strippin our dreams and goals, our hopes and then stops
We're surrounded by insecurity, fearingly livin in shadows, losing battles of mind to heart, we start too collapse
So past insanity they brandin me completely brain dead, fed up wit the accusations when half the nations is full of crap
Shits spinnin so fast I gotta stop and hurl, sick of the earth, guys throwin fists when they fought wit they girl
Bought them a pearl to make up for it, sure will not please me, but none of this is fact, jus my thoughts on the world

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^Again dawg make it bigger, hard to read so i cant give a good review on it cause its really hard for me to read it.

Copy it..........Paste it in Document/Wordpad............Highlight it and click the size to 10 or 12 so you will be able to read it

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That was actually really good.........I liked your rhyming scheme and the wordplay was good cause ou used your good vocab.................Overall I really enjoyed it..........................

Good work

Keep it up and keep postin' on the site

very good dogg... i liked that ,


but yea make it bigger...

Thanks a lot guys. Appreciate the positive notes. I plan on stickin around, this seems like a good site. But here is the text in bigger R.X, sorry bout that.

Innocence has evaporated, society's slapped and stated that evil's reserected, Satan's back inflated
And has cracked and grated us into nothing, molding our debating souls into pure evil, we're trapped and crated
Bowing down to the corporate minds, sellin out for sports and rhymes, resorting to contracts to report our minds
Back to with a court and bind, legally tied up and short a sign that says we goin to be alright, can't abort for time
To escape your brain and other memories, of bein sane and tougher when you was not exposed to the pain and suffer
Of others being Blamed for brothers' mistakes, rained on mothers parades when they sons bein framed for the shuffler
Of the person dealing the cards, stealing your hearts in the midst of chaos and replacin it with unhealing parts
So the kealing starts as your soul dies, no more feelings spark as your unemotional, and it's sealing starts
To shut out the right, now we phase two of life, as we pase through the strife and disgrace you with sights
Of evil, embrace you with new heights of sickness never seen, murder, rape, bodies traced from spite
Cause anger embelishes and soaks into our thoughts, pokes in and stops until we feel the hate, then ropes us and locks
Like we cattle, and shows us the shocks of evil's consequences, strippin our dreams and goals, our hopes and then stops
We're surrounded by insecurity, fearingly livin in shadows, losing battles of mind to heart, we start too collapse
So past insanity they brandin me completely brain dead, fed up wit the accusations when half the nations is full of crap
Shits spinnin so fast I gotta stop and hurl, sick of the earth, guys throwin fists when they fought wit they girl
Bought them a pearl to make up for it, sure will not please me, but none of this is fact, jus my thoughts on the world