Confused
 

This will explain my feelings right now....Vocab is a little low....But check it...

-Intro-
Right now been in this relationshit fo bout a year, I love her truely and her leavin is the only thing i fear, I cant lose her, I gotta ha ve her near, My head is full of voices, shes the only one i hear//

-Welcome To the Hell of Heaven-
My past is something i try to forget//
I was depressed, A rebel, everything you said i would neglect//

But all that i regret, This girl brought life to my soul//
It was like my fire was dying, but she kept it going wit her coal//

And she has so much more, Shes everything i believe in//
Shes like my god, not loving her is like a-deadly-sin//

Now listen in, Im releasing my trusest feelings and thoughts//
This girl is priceless, No ho thats bought//

I loved her from the start, I saw her and our hearts collided//
She brought me back to life, after all these years that i couldnt find it//

Now feel it, After the emotion its bout 15 months in//
I know what we have is true, and i'm not front-in//

What we have is somethin, but right now my emotions are starting to slide//

We've had every up and down, I just wanan end the fucking ride//(fighting)

I look in her eyes, i know its true, but shes feelin for another heart//

I feel like everything said was fuckin cheaper than wal-mart//

She tore me apart, i wanted it bad, i wated it to last//
Now, im back and i'm only rembered as-her-past//





I love her.....

Can i have replies on this please.....????.....

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arnt u a woman?

yea

some good metaphors used and some ok vocab, maybe u could write more, good solid piece tho Eborted rating- 7/10