I Wrote This Stupid Poem
 

Now who is hanging the Christian?
Pencil, Ceiling, Boredom
Warfare
By the
And for: men
Something on cable now
One thousand one hundred
Drunken bums - Kill them all
And freedom, a long shot

Small but makes you think. It kinda confused me though. It's certainly not stupid, free verse can be the best way to get shit across cuz you don't have to follow any pattern and the concept of originality is in almost every poem.

Thanks.....that's just the title because I couldn't think of any other title.........

Damn short and confusing.................LOL weird shit but nice drop

peep mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...75&pagenumber=1

It was ok. I didn't understand much of it. I agree with stark. He pretty much said it all.

It really isn't that confusing if you think about it........

nice, this is great shit
keep it up

Though i believe it's a bit rough (for a free verse...yes, a certain amount of 'order', or at least 'control' is needed...though as i said, only the slightest bit..)..

..but overall, quite strong, blunt and good for what it is...meaning was there and very apparent...in one than one respect..

..resp...

eh kid although it was short and at times a bit confusing - as in which way to percieve a line or watever - i liked it....u broke the borders of structure and just let it go

fashow

It does have order.....

Each line is a different rythm
Rythms of lines in order:
Iambic
Troche
Spondee
Pyrrhic
Anapest
Dactyl
Amphibrach
Amphimacer
Bacchius

And if you all really want me to, I'll explicate it for better understanding.

^^You don't understand. I said only a bit, and was talking about 'order' in a different way to how you're thinking.

Dunt matter, as said, i liked it a lot. Had little flaw to it, very original.

what he said...lol