The Unknown
 

All alone in this final destenation, no vibration./
Dark like da closet dats been in isolation/
Escape is futile if you think its another rotation./
One life, one time with no re-encarnation/
Ask yo self this question, whats next after death?/
Step by step life is stripped like a grand theft../
Right to left, da soul searches for the nest/
Lost to infest an afterlife tha is heart pounding/
Breaking through yo chest/ The unknown is mans
last step/ The truth to lifes mysteries are answered
like a multiple choice test/ Scan the information of human
lifes at its best/ The creation maybe hidden after your
body is separated from your mortal crest./ I be da south
central fundamentalist trying to reach da living dead/
Its about time i drop bombs full of hydrogen,yo its been
good rittens for da less hidden/ I speak for muthafuckas
who are unforgiven like hitler and his picnic of human
genocide driven./ I'm out, but do you smell what i'm cooking
in my kitchen? / Replies come tight when fu's don't be bitchin/

This was Ok
you need
to up it a lil here and there
7/10

^^what he said^^

You had good wordplay and vocab, but some of your lines were a bit long:
"Its about time i drop bombs full of hydrogen,yo its been
good rittens for da less hidden/", try to shorten them:

but overall it was a nice peice!

yeh the flow was off but it was pretty damm nice u got the foundation, good vocab, ok wordplay

eborted verdict- B

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