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Feelings...
Wake up look around to see that you aren't there/
Made an exit, walked up heavens stairs/ We were like brothers, two kids in the park/ Shoulda told me, never keep your feelings in the dark/ That fateful day i guess it was too much to take/ That horrible way, you just needed a break/ I perceived you as the strongest man in the world/ I regret the day you left me and your baby girl/ The nights spent cryin', the dreams of what occured that night/ Picture you dyin', wish you coulda put up one more fight/ But greed, hate, deceit, handed you defeat/ Without you here, life seems incomplete/ People are deceivin' you were a pure soul/ To be like you used to be my life goal/ But since you took those pills, Sittin' up there in heavens hills/ Victim to the quest for dollar bills, Couldnt even afford a square meal/ You were a soldier, the greatest i could ever witness/ It's sad but people treat death like just another business/ To read your letters, it sends chills down my spine/ Wishin' i could hear your voice one more time/ I woulda given anything to revive you in and instant/ Your death was a lesson, In life you must stay persistant/ Deep down i know that you had the will, power and the strength/ Its so sad to see that you could cut your life to such a short length/ Wish i was there to stop you, to comfort and console/ But on the highway to heaven you paid your toll/ Its a one way street, and i'll be there one day soon/ Wish you were here to see your baby girl bloom/ I know we'll fight on, keep your memory preserved/ Get us a table at heaven and keep it reserved/ I promise i'll finish what you started while you were here/ I promise i'll take care of your kids, i'll never disappear/ This is dedicated to your memory, a departing gift/ On the highway to heaven you should have offered me a lift/ I'll never forget the things you did to guide/ I used to feel ashamed because my dad committed suicide/ Today i look at your picture and feel nothing but pride/ |
^^^^^^^^ very touching piece should be in poetry liked it alot was feelin this all the way.1
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poerty is sleepy :sleep:... thanks man...
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i agree with P./...........go post this in poetry..........pussy pussy...
j/k.......flow was good......vocab good.....meta good............. good drop.........................POETRY forum here comes inspire |
^^^go back to h2... faggot... lol
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yea, i was fellin this, it was poetic but you could rap 2 it...
"I know we'll fight on, keep your memory preserved/ Get us a table at heaven and keep it reserved/" - nice |
Yup^^No Doubt, It was written well, good lyrics and all uh...Flowed well, good vocab, Multies were nice and all...Did well on this one....Upppinnnzzzz.....
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nice peice inspire,
well put together |
^^^^thannnks...
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damn, I feel a tear in tha bak of my eyes..lol j/p this was a real touchin piece man....keep up with tha good writin.....HoLLaa
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daz sum mad stuff man, hell meaningful n stuff
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