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Maven 06-07-03 04:52 PM

Forever
 
Sabrina was a girl who wore her heart on her sleeve,
letting what she felt show,at 16,she was hurt easily/
till one day she met a boy who acted just the same,
showed love, passion and disgust.he asked her name/
"I'm Sabrina" she replied and he said "my names Rob,
I've always watched you from afar"he said with a sob/
he claimed he loved her,knew that noone could best her,
viewing from the God's, perfection wearing polyester/
Sabrina found herself loving him more with each word,
already swept off her feet, and she never felt absurd/

A week or so later, Rob brought Sabrina to his home,
his parents had gone to Maui and left him all alone/
Rob stepped into the kitchen to cook them some food,
and Sabrina found herself sitting alone in his room/
she sat at his desk and saw his wallet sitting there,
she looked inside,his identification raised her hair/
Sabrina sat in shocked silence,not believing her eyes,
but there was no way around "driver's liscence, age:35"/
Rob got back in room and the silence still sustained,
he clubbed her head, she woke up on his bed chained/

Rob inserted himself into her mouth for first round,
she struggled and stuggled until she finally bit down/
detaching him from his manhood, Sabrina would regret,
he shouted in pain,the chains held her down like a net/
"you crossed the line,I didn't want to have to do this"
he drew the knife, and began carving signs in her tits/
she screamed and she screamed, but Rob kept inflicting,
the pain she hated, the chains just kept on restricting/
no matter how much she winced.look down at his endeavor,
Sabrina saw a heart carved, saying Rob + Sabrina forever...........

*Sabrina Tarantino was found dead last night. Her arms had been seperated from her torso, and her throat was slit. Robert Grant was found 10 feet from her with a knife lodged in his jugular. Police are still looking for those responsible.*

I tried a different style here. I don't usually tell stories.
Tell me what you think.
Peace

WORD~PERFECT 06-07-03 04:59 PM

I THOUGHT THIS WAS PHENOMINOL

Baron Mynd. 06-07-03 05:25 PM

Dope.
Flow was superb, great love story with a twist - i enjoyed it. Possibly an RB legend, get one of these guys to nominate it for you man.

Great job.

Maven 06-07-03 05:29 PM

thanks you two. RB Legend? shit, I didn't think it was that good.....
PEace

Grim85 06-07-03 05:30 PM

wow dude that is very dope, how u can wright about some shit like that very artistic of you A+

tRiLL 06-07-03 09:36 PM

haha that was madd ill..........its sorta 1 of em sotires that's liek says dont trust some one unlesss u knoe em.............

that was good....i liked it how the first 2 verses u acted like everything was going good n all.....but in the 3rd one it went horribly wrong........that was nice........................

"I tried a different style here. I don't usually tell stories."
i think it was good........keep the stories up

Maven 06-07-03 10:41 PM

thanks trill

Reno Starr 06-07-03 11:10 PM

Nice, Im a big fan of the story telling raps and you did it very very well. Was easy to get hooked on and made ya think and even wanna read it twice.

Peep my latest drop: 7 Days War.

Maven 06-08-03 12:49 AM

up^

Maven 06-08-03 11:45 AM

up^

Saladin 06-08-03 12:11 PM

Illness dawg..

shit..you elevate with every drop..

this was a dark twisted story dunz..

but ya flow was dope and ya use of words really impressed me..

no doubt..

Rb Legend?..give it a shot duke..

Peace
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Maven 06-08-03 12:12 PM

thanks saladin.....lol, I can't nominate my own piece, I would hate for it to be declined because of that

Maven 06-08-03 12:25 PM

slidin up................weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee eeeeeee

Atetrack define' 06-08-03 02:39 PM

the bes tpeice form the toronto gangsta hat man yet?...yes!.excellent story very well written,got gory :D goooood....hahahha gory is ill...but getitn his dick bit off kind a made me wince like ohhh dammit id kill her lmao...and i guess he did...nice imagery,flow on point,well written excellent ...

Maven 06-08-03 07:59 PM

lol, thanks atetrack
up^


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