lyrically dead
 

I'll rip your organs out to prove u aint got a heart to believe in yaself/
break ya legs, strangle you to ya death/
watch you pass out as i take away ya last breath/
see your face turnin blue and purple cause you out of air/
see the doctor proclaimin your damages can not be repaired/
and if i had a peny for every body i mangled, i'd be a millionare/
watchin you paraidin' around like you's got a record deal and a snare/
fight you off with my fists and leave you dead with a stare

This was good
I was digging this peice right chea

ain't much, tell me what u think

how can i could improve?

This Was Iight...Not Much Complexity But Still It Was Alright...I'd Give This A 6/10

Check Out My Drop.. What's The Difference ?

1. make shit longer, this is short even for a freestyle...
2. use multis, they spice up the flow
3. Your vocab is pretty good, use it more

keep elevatin dawg..

yea, it was an ok start... but you need to keep going with the flow