first time fresh-read this yall first thread on thsi shit
 

hhmmm iight yall i wasnt tryin to go fah structure on this shit or nu'n it was a straight keystyle so umm yea tell me wut u think

Pushin into me first time i been corrupted
My mentalities been disturbed feelin like girl interrupted
Soft on them lips hard pushin between them hips
skin between my thighs feelin like its bein ripped
Pain surges through my body as you push into me deeper
We gotta stop for a seck my innocence's now hidden go n seek her
As we continue the pain begins to diminish
T groove with you now fulfilling all your wishes
We stop, still together, sit n chat fo a sec
Keep goin after an I love you n a pec on the neck
A little harder a little longer, I take you to your climax
Im straight chillin, could keep goin, but you wanna relax
Suprised at the pain, in awe at the time
30 minutes of first time love makin stayin fresh in my mind

Eyo Ma This Was Pretty Dope..Keep On Droppin The Hott Ish...

thank u baby preciate it....uppin fha feedbak ya'll

feelin it, sounds like wat this gurl wrote me afta my first time...hahaha....decent drop...keep droppin....holla

hey good drop for a first keep pushing your self and you will over come like the line

~We gotta stop for a seck my innocence's now hidden go n seek her~

thought that was cute

yea yea, this dont really showcase what i can do i was jus tryin ta say sum shit real quick cuz its alot ta go thru lol anywayz

not bad at all for ur first drop....

but i just noticed that some lines dont fit and when u read it out loud its just that som words are like off but u really did a good job with freestyle like piece...

dont ever take my constructive critism gets to u...its just that im always a critique when it comes to this....

well..keep droppin..u got potential girl...