some quick shit for a colabo wid wooshy- wotz wrong?
 

not a freestyle jus some 20 min shit, i tryed to make it flow as best as possible share your thoughts on it with me


With myself im debating, tryna wage war against constant hating/
Deliberating on haunting thoughts, my mind should contain an 18 rating/
Yet muthafuckas on a different page, question my sickening rage/
When it comes to viewing my own visions im still two years underage/
Why the state? aren’t I the one surrounded with beautiful materials/
The one whos possessions extend more than free gifts in cereals/
Well, well im basking in my middle class home/
But becoz im privileged, don’t mean I can’t have a right to moan/
You can’t look in the photo albums, coz my problems aint jus visual/
There biblical, moral audio and trivial/
N Its so hard, when theres no1 with whom to share/
Lifes constant barriers, even though others are aware/
Communication? Aww yes ive witnessed a demonstration/
But my text on a moniter, ain’t really aural penetration/
I can watch and listen but myself I can not break/
N if I don’t find a formula soon, it will need to take/
Work from another section, to give me a confidence injection/
That way others will begin to know and understand my affection/
For them,then hopefully they’l make l more of and effort and be/
Able to figure out what im all about mentally/
And eventually ill find out for myself as well/
Maybe my thoughts and what came out of comes out of my mouth will gel/
Coz you see its easy to create a sudden twist of fate/
If u have support, but you see im still in wait/
Enemies and friends, should be completely separated from one another/
An evil one surely shouldn’t be considered a social brother/
But then its hard, you can’t just wave you wand and dispel/
Coz they once helped you stand up on the ground from which u fell/
Besides when others are in the equation, you’ve got a remainder/
Someone who doesn’t consider this, to be an invader/
So ill just stare, crossing my fingers tryna interact/
Tryna rediscover old chemistry thats jus seemed to collapse/
So ill put on a brave face, barely keeping myself in line/
But it jus feels, im tryna fight law and crime at the same time//

yo that was dope as hell...

With myself im debating, tryna wage war against constant hating/
Deliberating on haunting thoughts, my mind should contain an 18 rating/

fuck...that was some fuckin deep shit in the 1st 2 lines.......

Work from another section, to give me a confidence injection/
That way others will begin to know and understand my affection/

now theres another couple of dope lines i reckon that are dope....

keep that shit up man...peace....

Ohh yo....yall chek out my shit...All About Me or sumthin....let ,e know what ya think...peace

u get 17 IQ points

stop sleeping on this!!!

Itw as a hott piece dawg, one of the ebst i've seen on RB today, The flow and vocab were capital! This bar really took it:
"You can’t look in the photo albums, coz my problems aint jus visual/
There biblical, moral audio and trivial/" - lol

yo thankz people sure thing ill check yo thread bigez

yo if u peep this give me good feedback id be more than happy 2 reply 2 your current pieces as i ahve done wid everyone whoz replied so far

fuckin sleeping pricks up

ars bandits
up

fuck all of u sorry ass sleepers
up

Dat was sum tight shit dawg. Check mine out and see if u like it. Keep ya game up and keep spittin. peace

k fo shure