Dreams
 

aiight i havent posted in a while so i quickly created this.

How many people like me do ya see/|
White and busting their rap on mtv?|
craving fame but none know their name/
being put down they smuggle their shame/
as the spit in the underground
Waiting to be found/ becoming a hound/
as they put forth everything they've got/
put on the spot but there everything their not/
expected to be and their dreams break free
but they go home shattered /
Their dreams have been splattered/
On the pavement of hope/
So they turn to dope hoping to scope/
Out their problems with coke/
Till the OD on a drug called codeine/
And end up dead cremated instead/
And their remains scattered just like their dreams that were shattered.
Uppin for feedback and please just dont diss it. Give some advice

It had an aight flow the content of it was decent. Some things really didnt rhyme exmaple:

Out their problems with coke/
Till the OD on a drug called codeine/
And end up dead cremated instead/

But ya getting there with ya works, you slowly grow some.

Had some god stuff
in it but it ended weak
You need to work at it

FUCKIN MEX GET AT OUR BATTLE U STILL HAVENT POSTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!

O SHIT!
dark lord
i got mad props fo u ive seen yea shit u mad good

most of your verse was nice, but R.x was right about the stuff that didnt really rhyme, the rest was nice though

peace~~~

^^^ thanks ill make sure to watch that in the future. Uppin. Got 19 views 5 replys. Yall are sleeping