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PleDge 06-22-03 06:28 PM

runnin out of time
 
walking on an unmarked path
thinking unwanted thoughts.but letting them last
your torturing yourself why not just stop it and think
but your too far down . in deep depression you sink
faster and deeper theres no getting out
like quicksand on your shoulders, instead of sand..fear and doubt
LET GO but you hold on...or getting dragged downwards by mindtreams and letting go of my hand
when we took the vow of marraige...this sort of shit was nt planned
or watchin your child die.........worse than your parents
nothing can sure you from heartache....no rememberence
of good times we had its nothing but nothing-ness
but filled with unhappiness
you cant let yourself go.......unsuccesful in your own mind
time slips by . you grip on....were running out of time

filed 06-22-03 07:57 PM

hey girl this was pretty good, the one thing i didnt like was that one really long line but it was still good

The End 06-22-03 08:26 PM

This was good, I liked it. On a side note.. I put the right coding in your sig so you can display pictures, but the links you had for the pictures didn't work for some reason. *shrugs* Anyway, nice poem.

blood__thick 06-24-03 03:32 AM

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deushy 06-24-03 11:49 AM

nice one gurl

K.E.M 06-24-03 02:05 PM

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or watchin your child die.........worse than your parents
nothing can sure you from heartache....no rememberence


nice piece...wish it was longer but it was good.
liked those lines best up there.
had good attitude and emotion to it,keep writing.

one love

oddly ill 06-24-03 02:24 PM

nice piece shortie thought this was deep and everything just keep puttin down hottness like this aight
one

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Pax 06-25-03 05:26 AM

hey fam i saw this and decided to peep it since u WL-IS

this shit was deep, had a desperatness to it that u captured nicely. started off mysterious but the understanding of events comes to the reader as he progresses throught to the end. nicely done as far as netting grief and anxiety. this was a good RB.com piece, my props to u girl


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