runnin out of time
walking on an unmarked path
thinking unwanted thoughts.but letting them last your torturing yourself why not just stop it and think but your too far down . in deep depression you sink faster and deeper theres no getting out like quicksand on your shoulders, instead of sand..fear and doubt LET GO but you hold on...or getting dragged downwards by mindtreams and letting go of my hand when we took the vow of marraige...this sort of shit was nt planned or watchin your child die.........worse than your parents nothing can sure you from heartache....no rememberence of good times we had its nothing but nothing-ness but filled with unhappiness you cant let yourself go.......unsuccesful in your own mind time slips by . you grip on....were running out of time |
hey girl this was pretty good, the one thing i didnt like was that one really long line but it was still good
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This was good, I liked it. On a side note.. I put the right coding in your sig so you can display pictures, but the links you had for the pictures didn't work for some reason. *shrugs* Anyway, nice poem.
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nice one gurl
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nice piece...wish it was longer but it was good. liked those lines best up there. had good attitude and emotion to it,keep writing. one love |
nice piece shortie thought this was deep and everything just keep puttin down hottness like this aight
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hey fam i saw this and decided to peep it since u WL-IS
this shit was deep, had a desperatness to it that u captured nicely. started off mysterious but the understanding of events comes to the reader as he progresses throught to the end. nicely done as far as netting grief and anxiety. this was a good RB.com piece, my props to u girl peep my poems aight, holla |
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