freestyle diss
 

this is not directed 2 n e body here

I considered 'takin it easy' on you but we just dont relate/
U wouldnt know what 'hole' to stick it in even if Tiger Woods was ur mate/
You rap like a 'NEWBIE' sinkin in too 'deep, theres no point in tryin to particapate/
Not Even Wisdom Beyond Inner Earth can save you, time's up it's too late/
This will be a fatality like out of Mortal Combat/
you rap like a blind mouse, runnin straight to a 'mouse trap'/
If you had Mohammed~Ali or even Bruce~Lee on ur side id still-be-the-victor/
Cause ona scale from 1-10 I 'shock' earthquakers so bad they wont allow me-on-the-rictor/
You're speechless it's like being interigated by the 'F.B.I'/
Dangerous Ill Emcee(thats me) recognize how I created the term 'die'/
Ive squashed cochroaches smaller than you but had bigger respect for them/
But like eminem I tend to dislike gays(you) and leave them condemed/
Up in ur high horse u carry a torch wit u so u can say your 'presence' lights-up-the-room/
But we all know when it comes wednesday you change your name to 'trina' and switch~costumes/
Its disgraceful how u go 'down' quicker then the titanic without hittin an Ice Burg/
Even if you had a microphone strapped to your head you still couldnt be "heard"/
Now its time 2 see wether your lyrics will work/
There as reliable as gettin a story out of~a stutter victim, they 'Ju Ju Ju Jerk'/
My ideas are looming, you should 'hit' the net for some inspiration/
When asked if u've eva had sex you reply "Yes, only by masterbation"/
You couldnt spit out anything sensible even if you were chewin a dictionary/
Some advise, either check the net for "how to rap" or find the nearest library/
Tryin to protect yourself from my 'shots' wont work even while wearing a vest/
My rhymes bring around, a great amount of stress
After Reading my first battle I thought that would leave you dysfunctionally mental/
Mine will amaze you so much, you'll tape the screen, give it 2 your friends, and call it a rental/
Its a castastrophy comin up against me ill sweep u up, like a cyclone/
im finished with this punk, your pathetic, so take your rhymes back 2 tha trailor home/ :evil:

yo, i'm uppin for sum feedbak don't sleep on this piece

lol i like that stutter part. It was pretty d (decent) Keep spittin dawg

i thought this needed work. point of note, a written off the top is a "keystyle". vocab was basic a lot of the time and thepunches were pretty weakor not really punches at all. you should get some more practise and maybe read some of the pieces by the more veteran members.

keep trying.

thanx for both your replies, uppin for sum more feedbak