verse 1 2 a love song i'm writin
 

Verse 1:T-Nice
damn ma, you got me hypnotized, just like that biggie guy
while i'm starin, in those beautiful diamond shaped eyes
you're the kinda girl i thought, only existed in dreams, my love's realistic
you're the girl i want to love, not just to feel my stick
you on my mind, all the time, true love's what i feel for you
you were always there, as a friend, i always chilled with you
you're my inspiration, the reason i spit flames
the thought of losin you, brings more tears, then MJ's last game
usher might say "U Got It Bad"
when he's talkin to me, but i ain't hearin, i just wanna make u glad
you're the best thing in my life, i've ever had
i wish i could stop everything but us, so i could always have this feeling
can't wait to ask you the question, (will you marry me) while i'm kneelin
i ain't sayin nothin fake, this is all the real thing
i'm finished for now, it's time to let my ghetto girl sing

Chorus: T-Nice (Girl)
Baby you know it’s true (it’s true)
That I’m only lovin you (lovin you)
You and me together (you and me)
Forever (and ever)
Repeat once

This wasnt bad. I was feeling most of it. Good job.

thanx dawg, uppin for sum more feedbak

It was so-so but ya need to up your voacb. Also try to avoid rhyming the same words:

you on my mind, all the time, true love's what i feel for you
you were always there, as a friend, i always chilled with you

Thats all I can say abou it.

this was pretty good. but you need more complex words in here. feel me.

yea, thanx for the advice, i'll use it in the second verse, thanx for the comments