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MArcianno vs Blac Haze
u spit first.
5-7 lines (really short) no feeding no hate /crew/dr votes |
its 8.. hope thats cool..
Trying to come with that “lame rhyme”, maybe if I gave this “dame time” he wouldn’t come with the “same rhyme”// Step up and try to “take mine”, so hand you the mic and leave U lookin like a mime//*cough cough*…choke My flow is constant and my punchs are deadly like they came from an AK Burst// "Murder" this cat, take him out "first" to show him Haze at his Worst//*murder in the first* The closest this guy would be to being “Big” is adding an “L” to his record// Big L Lost and Found this guys looking for his career I hear hes offering a big reward// ~*FiNiShEr*~ I’d cut open your stomach and strangle you with one of your intestines// Then stick it down yo throat to show you what its like to be force fed a shit line//*stop wit yo bs haha* |
aight check it...:
Haze u've seriously miscalculated ur opponent- this battles illegitmate, ur missin several components// dat verse barely hit me nigga i only got ~nipped~u like a fat kids pants cuz jus waitn 2 get ~ripped~// You can't imagine how to comprehend my rhymes to relate, Three rapid gashes from a 6 inch blade your head I must de-cap-a-tate// You'll never get in front of me cos your always a step behind, that’s why your homosexual, chasing rectum consumes all your time// Your rhymes reek of wackness and counterfit mixed together, Worse than a diss track written by Ja Rule, your rhymes humiliate you forever// My composite composition, on-line is a long tradition incompetent rhyme submissions, I dominate with no competition/ / You'll commit suicide after reading this, you could say its fatal information, Cos nobody gives a fuck about the formation, your verse was your dying declaration// that'll teach u... uppin for votes |
teach me? haha i knew I was going to get ripped anyways, but I'm not goign to be a pussy and duck out a battle
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hah its just something i like putting after my verses...
props for "but I'm not goign to be a pussy and duck out a battle" keep it up.. u have a nice verse uppin....for votes! |
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Marciano that was nice everything
punches metaphors i like ur flow its was smoothe and that last line was a perfect endin check out my battle http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=60352 |
iight marssianno raped him so bad it tore open a new asshole, good battle mars- punches flow ECT.....
hit my battle from my sig up wid an honest vote |
thanks dawg....
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marciano was good here
so was the other guy Marciano just played his ass plain and simple \ http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=59749 |
Marciano's flow was better his punches were stronger, overall a better verse..........both of ya keep ya headz up.......and keep spittin........haze props for not duckin.............peace
Vote = Marciano Return the favor fairly ..... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=60510 |
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Here is the breakdown
Blac Haze.....work on your flow.punches...rhyme scheme..and definitly start using multies.Check in the wackness emergency center...it will help you out a lot......and cut your lines..too long.. Quote:
obviously you have know flow if you have to highlight were it rhymes..If you were gonna use a weak line...you could have cut it to this... Coming with “lame rhymes”, if I gave this kid “dame time” he wouldn’t come with the “same rhyme”// That would make it not sound so stretched.... Quote:
That has no transition.....and your flow makes your medicore punches even more treacherous to read....You need to work on everything....it will all come to you within time if you keep at it.... Macianno's was nothing special....needs work...but definitly got the job done.He has some sort of flow,and yes,punchlines. [quote]Haze u've seriously miscalculated ur opponent- this battles illegitmate, ur missin several components// dat verse barely hit me nigga i only got ~nipped~u like a fat kids pants cuz jus waitn 2 get ~ripped~// [quote] The wordplay is also lacking....obviously Macianno came harder....though you both need to elevate...keep up... vote=Marcianno |
thanks fo tha voe and the well done explanation...
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