first open mic! -- peep!
 

dw grabs the mic in an open mic 4 the first TIME!
SHIT HAPPENS!---

--shit happens in this world, in your hood which will make ya wanna surrender/
hold up the white flag n make u question ya gender/
well this is a message from me, personally, tellin u 2 take the blows thrown n throw bac accurately/
expect shit, expect things 2 go wrong-- not every little thing will go smooth like notes in a song/
wen a job goes wrong take the time ya given, av a chance 2 go 2 heaven, cos runnin is forbidden n lets face it ur ass is neva hidden/
i've been there, behind bars pretendin i didnt care, feel my brain flare wen the gay bitch in the showers used 2 stop 2 stare/
but now im out, im past it, y'all lifes a gift last it/
a journey where every nigga has a different map, sum still got shit 2 come but me i just started my second lap/
life ain't a rule u can't just break it, face it y'all its specific u can't replace it/
u ain't happy wiv your current life, dedicate it 2 music, use the mic n don't abuse it/
people commitin suicide 2 get 2 a beta place, well in that case hells a beta place, n if thats true i'll walk out this thread wiv a red face/
u drivin bac from a shootin wiv a guilty consience, its nonsense, the police stop u n realise u drivin wivout a liscense/
shit happenin, we all tappin-- bitches while rappin, so stop yappin n get off ya ass n get backin--/
--from a producer so u can record some tracks, then u won't av 2 worry bout tax n you'll be off the streets sleepin in sacks/
now all u lowlifes pull away from ya dick n refraine from the toss, cos shit happens but theres more 2 life, thats the point im tryin 2 get across!

uppin sum feed bac!!!!

uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!

yo that was ok but u need more

alrite i'll edit it now!

uppin!

You kinda like me, drifted over to open mic just to change up from the battles all the time. Anyhow your content was o.k. but what messed this up was your flow, if seemed uneven and off, your wordplay and multis was decent but nothing to holla for, not wack but a average piece

Stay up

4real dawg thanx! yeh thats y im ere bored 2 fuck of battlin all da time! flows goin down rite in my head but maybe not 2 other readers!

uppin!

i know man....its the same with me....wen i bus my shit out....out aight,and sounds really ok.....but other readers cant get it.....anyway.....nice drop man....next time im dropin sumthin...im tellin witch beat i used....or instrumental so ppl can try and figure out the flow better.....any1 think its a good idea..??

uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !

This Was A Tight Drop..Good Wordplay n Vocab...Keep Up Tha Good Work

thanx man, uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yeh aight worplay aight flow, seemed some of the rhymes daint sound right but overall it was good, maybe vocab could be upped a tiny bit but it was still a decent read

Eborted Verdict- B-

uppin!!!!!!!