Truth
 

A glass mirror in front of me but I cannot see a reflection.
Our lives lived yet meant nothing because deception.
Layed down before you what more could you hope for.
You holding my hand making me want for no more.
The aches I feel are not from my own pain.
Insanity lived through us but i remain sane.
Whirpools of suffering that drain the esence of me.
The walls caving in but i'm freed with just one plea.
Floating through reality but your the only truth.
I'm the baby at the end ready to be soothed.

Hey Gyrl...
When I seen this thread i thought, there must be a reason why no one has replied to this..and now after reading it, i can say that there certainly is not. I was feelin this a lot, great imagery and transfer or emotions. Stay up and keep postin.
Peace.

Short but this one was nice..........keep droppin'

lol..i remember you thanks chickita...i've haven't been on this site in a hot minuete..yea..i dont know why everyone isn't replying..b/c i've been replyin to there pieces..RB must be getting messed up now or something..cuz peeps must think there too good to reply..but oh well..God bless...1

donno if your memory had room for me but hey girl..
good to see a piece from you, short and beautiful..expression,wording of it,attitude of it was nice..i got into it,made me think.

one love

Re: Truth
 

i liked ur simple description of this...good opening!



these lines showed ur pain and desire for something...could put metaphor too ya kno....but that was just a thought..its good as it is...



these lines are alright...just basically stating how the pain can lose someone's mind but still fights for it



i liked how u use "whirlpools" its like its unending...its circles around....and the imagery and metaphor of this is really good...




the ending is always been my favorite ..but in this case...it left me in daze ..its like its not a good ending...but i liked how the way u did it...props


simple but very creative....love it!

This Was A Nice Piece..I Was Mos Def Feelin Dis...Short n Sweet...Good Shit Ma..

uh shitnit...tha meaning..u didn't grasp it..aight..speaks about my man and God at the same time...how...i've layed my life before God...living for him..and only him..and statin to my man..that i will be there before him...helping him through anything. Its talking about how i feel the pain of the world..through God..and the pain through my mans lives...and i could explain it more..but i dont feel like it

i read it the 4th time.....and i got it ...hehehe...

maybe i got different views about ur piece ya know...lol


but definitely good!

^^^Shiznit: That reply you gave above is what i mean. No doubt...




Lady trinity (i always liked Baby Blues..but you're the artist...)..

This was a nice short piece. I vaguely remember you always did short but well compressed pieces.

IT had a depth to it that echoed the sentiments and imagery. For such a short piece, that's something hard to do...

..nothingh else to say, but...

...resp..

Short and powerfull impressive fo realz i like this

thanx baby boi..God bless..1..