New shit but i dunno if its good... u tell me
 

I came to battle wit real mc's but everytime
I battle, god throw me fuckin phonies//
I been gone but came back and tryin new shit
Sit ur ass down and listen to tha shit I spit//
I hate negative type niggaz dem
Wanksta type niggaz//
Talk about they have heat when
they pullin water gun triggaz//
I come wit a gun but
its not a "super soaker"//
It'll light ur ass up make
u lose weight like "Al Roker"//
I got dealt tha best hand in this game of poker
Then I toss out ur trademark card, The Joker//
Im tha type of nigga that stays packed and
study up on them new skillz that u lacked//
Gimme "Bigger Business" and a cat like "Cassidy"
cause ur not "2 Furious" enough to be "2 Fast" for me//
Ima be in "The Jungle" and look atcha rhyme "Book"
Then I shred tha shit up like Im "Emmiril" the cook//
Im marked for "Death" so i get out tha "Row" And
I dont duck under bullets like yo bitch givin a blow//
Tha word vocab is not in my dictionary So Ima
kill a nigga and let u play "Pictionary"//
Tha murder goes under as an "Unsolved Mystery"
64 Killa got a Legendary History//
Ima "Lay Tha Smackdown" like "WWE"
but make ur ass "Tap Out" like "UFC"//
I'll be "Tha Rock" and u be tha "Bottom" cause tha
bottom of tha barrell is where my ass taught him//
I made a hole through ur nigga's gut now he lyin
wit his eyes shut on his back and his butt//
I'll pull off sum "Bruce Lee: Enter Tha Dragon"
that'll make all u niggaz jump on my bandwagon//
Now Ima fade out in tha history of "Deadly Arts"
and be best known for my fuckin street smarts//
I'll beat a nigga's ass and tha crowd want more so
I give him tha "Phoenix Smash" Like "Paul" in "Tekken 4"//
Complex? Fuck dat I do what I want Im end this
shit here cause ur ass is nothin but a front...//

BE straight up honest. No bullshit.

that shit was way better than your last keystyle some good shit in there like

Gimme "Bigger Business" and a cat like "Cassidy"
cause ur not "2 Furious" enough to be "2 Fast" for me//

your elevatin alot.......that was some good shit

thanx man

Waitin for more comments

this was pretty good...overall i'd give you a 7/10...jus for the simple fact that at some points it seemed as if u were jus tryin to rhyme...but it was still good...ur word play was good...nice vocab...pretty good

can't wait to see ur next open mic

thanx. Im workin on it as of right now

I LIKE THE GANGSTER SHIT THAT STILL HAS SUBSTANCE WIT WORD PLAY. I'M FEELIN YOUR SHIT, GOOD FLOW. YOU COULD COME MORE ABSTRACT BUT THAT FLOW DIDN'T CALL FOR IT.

Thanx for ur comment. I dunno but it just hit me to write serious so i did. Still wantin more.

w0rd.....

thanx for tha comment. Anymore feedback?

Yeh...This Was Pretty Nice,I Haven't Seen Your 1st Open Mic But This Is Nice Tho..Keep Droppin

Thanx and ur name is cool. When I 1st saw it I didnt get it but tha 2nd day i did

cmon i need feedback

It Wasn't Very Nice...... Now Stop Askin' For Feedback Cause ur Pushin' Down The Good Open Mics......

Shut yo bitch ass up nigga. Its all good though. But dont tell me what to do sucka ass bitch.

"Cmon Wit It. Cmon Wit It."
- Capone, Def Jam Vendetta: BLAZIN'!!!

"Stop actin like a bitch!... Dawg!"
- DMX, Def Jam Vendetta: Victory Taunt