Down and Out
 

first audio i've done in months so i really want some feedback i've never been great. so all i want to get is a honest opinion on if i got better i'm a leave a link to my music page i was hoping people would check my older stuff and compare it to this new track

SoundClick Page:www.soundclick.com/bands/dirtboy69.htm

**Links for Song "down and out"(the new song i just finished)**

Lo Fi: http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=419381&q=Lo

Hi Fi: http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=419381&q=Hi

this track was aiight, you need more of a mic presence, put more feeling into it to get more out of it. ya know what i'm sayin. but keep doing your thing and elevate dawg.
hit up my post if ya can

thanks for the reply i'll peep any of your posts i can find

lacks emotion/style/mic presence delivery needs wrk flow just went through da beat didn't really ride or flow off beat it was jus kinda there n got by

voice is monotone lyrics is coo but u jus need to wrk on sum aspects of ya rappin short track too but n e ways stay up n keep droppin
try n be concious of how u sound while ur recording u gotta put effort into gettin style/mic presence n emotion when u rap


Peep my trax appreciate it* http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=61785

Ye your voice is way to monotone and I your voice is way to plain you need to use emotion. It kinda sounds like your talkin wit a beat so work on that and you'll sound aight.

this was wack..

flow, delivery.. all was pretty weak


sorry.

thanks for the replies i guess

yo lord mowf leave him alone he was aight, u jus need more mic prescense

you sound bored as fuck..

flows off..

lyrics are ok..

wait till your parents leave the house to record if u dont wanna be loud when they're there....LMAO.... either that or say fuck with it and put some fucking emotion into it..

oh yeah..

you dont sound comfortable on the mic.. get live.. put some energy..

you sound scared or something.. pretend your the dopest ever and your better than everyone else.. you gotta sound confident... t

thanks for the replies i'll be hittin some of this other stuff in minutes