RapVerse.com Community - tryin to get back up there

yo im tryin to get back up to the top again, and when i too im gonna blow that motha outta this game. heres a kwik battle i did wid my cuzin for a warm up. tell me what you think what i need to improve on.

(mine)ShadyBizniz08 (4:43:45 PM): yo, you betta watch that mouth ill break it, betta hide that mic cus ill take it, i dont fear death fuck ill fake it, you can doubt me but ima make it, i spit fire cus you say shit, laugh my ass off as you taste it cus you cant take it,ima keep spittin cus if i passed the ball youd break it, you cant spit no shit so you shout it, got me lookin like a shrink as you tell me all about it,what the fuck kid shit this aint no sykitrist visit, you misfit, you damn missed miss git, kiss this kid, not not my dick you prick ash'l lick that i mean my ass hear take a picture so youre pleasure wil always last,i hope i made you see how much of an mc you made outta me, dont care if i do face the elite i will never accept defeat, i know you dicapointed bro but this aint gonna be added to another one of your k.os, i mighta lost an hit the ground but you gotta be smokin somethin if you think ill be pushed around.

XCrzXSlimX (4:55:41 PM): Alright bitch its time fer round two, You really shouldn't fuck we me cuz your gana get pounded dude, Im gana be grounding you and plowing you into the floor, then when your dead ill go after your whore, Im kicking you out of the door, cuz now im back to even the score, Im the mc in the family don't you forget, your tryen to rhyme and you hope that you spit, that wasn't a freestlye you wrote all that shit, And I might need a phyciatrist, But at least im not buying shit from druggies to high to spit, You need to smoke your grass before the second round, and if you think your winning me you must of smoked a pound, And why are you saying that your battling the elite, bitch ive seen better raps from Elise, And now your frowning cuz you thought that you had it, I don't know why your fucking with me you flaming fagget, I still don't know why your fucking with me, dog your only a bitch that's barely 13, its so nice of you to loose just for me, But Im making you loose cuz im the best in the world, if you ever doubt me just ask your girl,

(mine)ShadyBizniz08 (5:14:05 PM): 13 gainst 15, the probabablity dont seem to fair, but ill battle a pussy like you any time any were, you talkin shit bout you bein the only mc in our fam ily thats fuckin stand up comedy, ive told you i dont need crap to spit, i dont need samck acid and that lsd shit, youve got me pissed, you winnin this battle it dont fit, its like you and that elise churchill bitch, you wish chris then you wake up, you say im writin this shit, make me think you smokin your make up, and thats write i got a hor, she aint luvin you, she aint runnin to that condom store, cus she dont date ass wholes morons and pin dicks no more, cus she aint neva seen a gay ass faggot like you before, talkin bout groundin me to the floor, betta ground some coffe cus im higher then youve eva been before, dont diss me nomore, cus then you wont miss me nomore, then you wont get me pissy no more, and then you can be miss prissy again, tryin to calculate ill the ill human shit that you said, it dont compute, here take a supstatute, yo im chris, did i beat spencer uhh well i wish, to mee rappin is like catchin a fish, when you miss try again, kid stop tryin youll loose again and again, talkin shit about me writin that freestyle, bullshit you can even ask my pen, yoou just aint loose to taken abuse from you cuz, just becuase hes gotta girl gotta life gotta place in this wirld got some talent and got no challenge he cant beat dont mean you gotta try to diss me fuck it bitch just fuckin accept this difeat