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criticalrican 06-27-03 10:30 PM

~*New Piece*~*Critical Lyrics*~*Rate 1-10*~
 
New 2 site, 2nd piece dropped, rate 1-10.............

I spit lyricist kryptonite, intensify, intense design, distinctive sign, break the mind...
Fuck wit me I release my wrath, when im psychopath, on this I beat u "back in time", and slash ur "past"...
Simplistic style is what u posess, when I spit intense, rhyme crotest, and release a mess, my lyrics infest, mind-bogolin, and leave u a test...
Scriptual damage, extractive famine, testin and standin...
I am the whole package, there is no way to kill, unable to rhyme wit me, i spit intricate skills...
Rhymers fantasy, theres no escapin me, when i spit tragic schemes, to kills emcees, no surpassin me...
My rhymes will make u "think suicidal" when u have "death at mind"...
I spit inccesant, while ur left behind, unable to find, when I spit unkind...
Counterproductive ass rhymes is all ur usin, u cant win u "tie" claimin u "rap music" (wrap music) ...
Lyricaly prevailed, i abolish all those emcees who have lost and failed...
Many names I've been called back, the sultan of rap, the lyricist that traps, rhymer intact, spittin attacks...
I spit back defense, when my rhymes commence, and i spit intense, and I "rock back" "sediments"...
U cant wreck, suspect, defect, deflect, infect, protectin me, I spit back with complexity neccecities...
My technical lyrics, will attack the spirit, of the first divine child who can hopefully hear it...
I am the savior of rhymes, truthful all times, scriptor of lines, when I'm releasin my mind...
Im the lyrical legend, as high as the heavens, with my exclusive raps, sum shit ur not gett-in...
Call me the unbelieved, lethal emcee, unable defeat, when i rhyme as hard as can be, you'll be kissin my feet...
I know u cant believe in this, scriptual ge-ni-us, "layin layers" like lines of "igneous"...
Hate me, curse me, I spit with no mercy, Im unbeatable, u really cant hurt me...

smokedout411 06-27-03 11:18 PM

your just puttin words together that make no sense... on a scale 1-10 i'd say 2... and thats pushin it.

criticalrican 06-27-03 11:59 PM

yo wateva dawg, they make sense but i dont think u understand em, but wateva, aint about 2 start beef wit u but, i think u look up the words and really look at the piece....upin

criticalrican 06-28-03 01:15 PM

fuckin upin for sum feedback...

criticalrican 06-29-03 01:59 AM

upin

Prolifik Prophet 06-29-03 03:28 AM

yeah I see this shit is kinda abstract for the average head but I liked it dog...I'd give it a 7.5

Tutti 06-29-03 03:30 AM

I give it a 8.

RythmicTendicies 06-29-03 07:06 AM

Quote:
your just puttin words together that make no sense... on a scale 1-10 i'd say 2... and thats pushin it.


^^Get a Dictionary dawg^^

This was pretty tight for a newb, You have decent vocab, just try to sue it a bit better, and don't cram it all into one line, you know? But you good potential no matter what Smoke says...

Kepp elevatin dawg! (oh...give it a 6.9/10 - not quite a 7)

criticalrican 06-29-03 12:28 PM

Good look on the feed dunnies...will elevate...upin...1

Uben. Sonned 06-29-03 06:29 PM

i liked it it had good vocab in it and it made sence so 7/10

criticalrican 06-30-03 12:04 AM

Good look on the feedback dunnie, all these other people talkin about my shit makin no sense....upin....

criticalrican 06-30-03 06:00 PM

upin


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