how would it be?
 

this isnt sposed to be a rap its just some shit i wrote and wanted tha peeps on here to rate it 1-10 on tha level that you would call it and reasons why


I WISH FOR JUST ONE MOMENT IN TIME YOU COULD SEE WHAT I GO THROUGH EVERY DAY. YOU COULD HEAR WHAT I HEAR IN MY HEAD, THA TAUNTING THOUGHTS, THA MOCKING OF MYSELF CONSTANTLY PUTTING MYSELF DOWN FOR EVERYTHING. YOU COULD SEE WHAT I SEE, THA WAY I SEE THA WORLD AND THA PEOPLE AROUND ME. YOU COULD FEEL WHAT FEEL, ABOUT YOU AND ME, ABOUT EVERYTHING THAT SUCKS ME INTO THINKING THAT MY LIFE WILL NEVER GO RIGHT AND BE GOOD. YOU COULD HURT LIKE I HURT, AND YOU WOULD KNOW THAT ALL THIS PAIN COMES FROM YOU AND WHAT YOU DO TO ME EMOTIONALLY, EVEN THOUGH YOU DON’T DO IT INTENTIONALLY. YOU WOULD WISH WHAT WISH, YOU JUST WANTED TO BE LOVED AND HAVE AN EASY LIFE WITH OUT SO MUCH PAIN THAT ALL YOU WANT TO DO IS DIE SOMETIMES. YOU WOULD CRY WHEN I CRY, YOU WOULD FEEL WHAT I FEEL, THAT THIS WHOLE WORLD WILL NEVER BE REAL, NO ONE CAN HELP YOU CAUSE THERE IS TO MUCH TO DO. IF YOU WERE TO GO THROUGH WHAT I GO THROUGH EVERY MINUTE OF EVERY DAY WOULD YOU STILL TREAT ME THA SAME WAY IS THA ONLY THING IM TRYIN TO SAY.

uppin for some ops

UPPIN SOME OPS

COME ON NOW

I REALLY WANT PPLS OPS

HOLLA BACK

AT ME

shit was heartfelt ma...I feel you on that shit girl for real nahmean...we kinda the same in wayz you know...holla at 'cha boy

this was okay...should've posted in the Poetry Forum.
Ditch the Caps, it takes away from what you're writing.
This came from deep, obviously, but you should try to expand on what you're feeling and thinking.
It helps the reader get into your piece more.
Just My Two Cents.
Peace

STILL UPPIN FOR OPS




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That was a thing you wrote i like it.Maybe we can battle sometimes.What do you say

I really like you poem.I rate it a 9.If you want to battle holla at me.

Post it in the poetry section next time.

Weird yet real

Keep it up