Addlibb (3-2) vs. R-Rated (2-1)
 

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Topic...
innocence

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So the subject is inocence...alright I am feeling that. This should be a good battle. Good Luck Addlibb...

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innocence...................hehe, yeah good stuff

g'luck R-Rated,

-pz

Dam i just got loads of idea's so mines done already...

Goin for, innocence in a bad situation.

[The Incident]
I was sittin in mass when tha bomb blasts hatched..
debris flying I'm crying.. God save me fast..
Dust powdered and it's crowded.. my wife lays dead..
a stained glass gash bleading red.. blood pooled round her head..
I grabbed my kids and I said.. "we've gotta get out"
People huddled in denial.. What's this madness about..
The pews splintered and I'm steppin on the bodies of friends..
Civil War? My Lord.. will the insanity end..
Here comes tha troops on the loose.. I gotta react..
Scooped up my kids and I dash.. before the next impact..
on tha ground lies a mac.. and a full clip of ammo..
Momentarily it's darin me to act like rambo..
But I know.. "though I walk through tha shadow of death"
"the Lord is my shepherd" and I need nothing less..
than a miracle.. if I respond in kind..
I'm no better than them.. so I leave it behind..
Spirit fills me divine.. and a light shows tha way..
As I run I pray.. Father in heaven please stay..
guide my footsteps and also.. My God please forgive them..
For they know not what they do.. and I hope for a blessin..
I bust out tha back.. past the rat-a-tat-tat..
Burstin amunitions aimed... right at my back..
In a stage of innocence like peer pressure and crack..
me and my children fall flat.. and cover our heads..
as tha napalm rain falls and blankets tha dead..
the stink-and-tha-stench rises deep-as-a-mist..
concussion grenades detonate.. shrapnels sprayed but they miss..
I give my daughters and son one more kiss.. and tell them I love them..
no matter what happens.. I'll be in heaven above them..
I shove them.. foreward.. towards tha last Red cross truck..
as they run I've spun.. and raise my eyes... wish for luck..
Then provide tha destraction.. in sacrificial type stature..
I head straight for disaster.. and commend my soul to my master..
Lord forgive me.. for the things left undone..
A voice from heaven fills my ears.. "Welcome my son".....

[EnD]

-peace

Here is my spit..
 

Aight here is my topical spit...

[Situation]
Sitting in this cell, I invision comiting sucide and what it would be like to be in hell
Nightmares keep me up threw the night, all I see is the memory in black and white
I am still awaiting my sentence, learning the way of thug life from Jay-T, my apprentice
He was sentenced to life at age 22, he killed the nigga who raped his baby boo
Its been three long months and still no convicition, I gave him my story and he approached me with a diffrent proposition...
He said.."From what I hear you sound like an innocent man, lets talk the situation over and come up wita masta plan"
My lawyer told me that I should just plead to murder in the first degree..but I can't..I am almost on top in da rap industry
Me and Jay-T talked over the next few weeks, that nigga even kept me outta gettin fucked inbetween my butt cheeks
But one night I awoke from where I was sleeping, I heard some noise outside my cell and I slowly began peeping
Two security guards had this nigga against the wall, they kept beating him but his ass just wouldn't fall
I finally realized it was that dope man Jay-T, I got their attention as Jay ran towards the doors trying to flee
But that bitch cop turned out and put a slug to his knee, the cops caught up with him and Jay kept saying please
Jay pleaded to the cops for his life in dread, then the cop pulled the trigger and now Jay lay dead.

Court Room
Sitting with my defense attorney palms sweety and but I try to keep my cool
I sit there thinking with all the shit that goes on "What are they trying to pull?"
I hear voices but I'm too distracted and my mind won't put the words together
Wondering will I see my son anytime soon, or will I be stuck in this place forever
I suddenly come back to reality and the judge asks for the defendant to rise
I stand up and I can feel my knees wanna buckle but I keep myself full-size
He says the jury has reached a verdict, I close my eyes and pray to god this comes out like I perdict
The jury stands up and a brunette in the last row begins to speak, her soft lips move and so does her boney cheeks
I felt prision was near until I began to hear.."We find him Not Guitly" as my eyes begin to water and I lost all my fear
I looked to the sky and thanked god foy my praier's he comprehedenced, and I thanked Jay-T for makin me fight for my innocence

~1~

damn yall...this shit was another tight topical..

I'll break it down like this...(poor, average, good, great)

Addlib ;

Opener - Good
Storyline - Good
Flow - Good
Enjoyment - Good
Lyrics - Good
Vocab - Average
Consistency - Average
Ending - Great

R-Rated ;

Opener - Good
Storyline- Good
Flow - Good
Enjoyment - Good
Lyrics - Good
Vocab - Average
Consistency - Good
Ender - Good

Addlib (1 great, 5 goods 2 averages)
R- Rated (0 great, 7 goods, 1 average)

Vote - R-Rated

Reason : i think add fell off a lil torwards tha middle

This was mad tight...it had to great stories and shit, mad hott.

Opening:although both were good, i think addlib got that
Storyline: both emcees put out good stories, but i liked courtroom better, then the other two
Flow: belongs to addlib
Lyrics:is a tie
vocab:is a tie
ending: both were good but addlib got a good ending

vote:Addlib gets my vote, both had hell of good verses, but addlib had a good storyline and shit which appealed to me more. R-Rated had a hot ass verse but addlib was better to me.

OK, you guys are making this very hard for me, because both of you had great stories. But you guys really hurt yourself by not following the topic. It really felt to me that you both wrote your stories, and then looked back and saw what the yopic was, and just added that as your last word. So with that out, I have to vote for the best story. Which I really felt that AddLibb had, your wording was a lot better then R-Rated's, which made it a little easier, you both had great verses,but in the end, Addlib's left a lasting impression.

this was a nice battle...hard decision to see who won. I think addlib took this. R-rated was good as always but i liked add's better. overall it came off as really good to me. I especially liked the ending. r-rated i liked the "Courtroom" part of ur flow also..but addlib won this

vote- addlib

This Was A Capital Battle, Both Had Good Verse's, Both Sorta Follwed The Topic But As Mad Said, You Sorta Rushed It in, Wheras You COuld'dve Spanned It OUt, You Know? R-Rated I Felt Lacked In Wordplay, But Narrowly Won With Vocab...

The Courtroom Story Was Brutal, But R-Rated's "Situation", Was Overpowered By ADD's Spit. Both Your Verses Flowed Like A Surge Of Electricity, Hott...

But Overall I Gotta Give This One To "addlib", Only Narrowly Won...

VOTE:addlib

^^Word...Rated Had A Nice Drop Without A Doubt But Add Just Had That Little Bit More...Add Had Nice Vocab And Liked The Wordplay...Rated Ya Verse Lacked On That...
Nice Battle But I Think Addlibb Won...

Vote - Addlibb

aite.. r rated..good story line but adddlibs was better..more interesting..beter flowed..i cudnt blink when i was readin ya shit but den my eyes started to burn..so idid...but i idnt miss a line..shit was hot from ya both///but addlibs was starte up better put to gether sum his lines were ill as fuk..dat rambo one..i was feelin...]

Addlib [4-2]
R Rated [2-2]

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