N.E.W.S ( Now Everybody Will Suffer )
 

dont listen to the news....


magazine descriptions, gun clips ravage scenes/
victims from Africa to Palestine, pilots scream/
spit ganja, silent beams, violent means/
bomb threats, Khanjar Steps the battles are under depth/
the truth of deciption to move these weapons/
this here is the extensive of you and your enemy/
used to offending me, developing proof of color seperation/
like pictures of booths in Ramallah stations/
its time for Allah, basically given to you/
see its driven to use, manufactured and given to lose/
market social losses, vocal goat carcass/
to the heart like atrichokes, spars are bomb bunkers/
bought mothers for big brothers gone like lost uncles/
all my body Islamic, straight from tendors like Pavoratti/
mocking in trials like Charski, moans of what i'm leakin/
eye beam, i hope you namean like Arabs sleepin/
from what i've seen naturally bottled tears like visine/
dont rot in your fears, you were brought over here/
to brighten the terror of Jahinam caught in mirrors/
prepared to sell your minds for uncivilized lives/
then shack up in homes for nights/
you dont control the time, put your hopes aside/
we factional actional facts wistless/
beat these bastards like fish shit/
last last words i spit this verse to master assumption, over stressed plans/
lets hope you find the truth, while doing your Thing like Gomez humpin his pet hand/
dont let them bother you brother/
dont watch the news, now everybody will suffer/
domes lost to this use like Iraqi troops/
i'm talkin you (who), me and the rest of the planet, to all issues political/
spit a few scourn bone tissues....

hmmm..*strokes beard*....

...an intriguing piece. Some references i had to think about. Maybe you should clarify some of them using '*'.

But yeah, you came well with this. Though at times i felt you overloaded it with references and complexity (the piece couldn't handle it...to heavilt compressed in a 'structure' that wont hold it...)..

still...i felt parts of it quite well. Especially the first four or so lines which were very well put. Using a simple yet effective 'stop-start' style to, er...good effect..

..resp...

not bad

^^^That's a bullshite reply. We see you do it again, we (the mods) will close one of your threads.

Yeah i know varentao...i told The End about that kid ..he was Masta D, Hyper Shadow and now Fierce Shadow...he was the one who kept doing this and kept posting 'Great"...

what a pop tart! but yeah he IP banned him already so no worries

alright bout the piece...

really interesting piece....the whole structure of the poem came hard that made it hard for me to understand some of it...i mean i do intellectually understand but at some emotional poin it was kinda off...but defnitely a powerfull poem...some words did awed me...the content was defnitely out there

BRILLIANT!

very good

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