My flow to Jay-Z's new banger "Stop"
 

U dont want beef cause I'll have u on lock and
when I kick ur ass, ur bitch'll be on my cock//
I keep stack for days and trees for weeks My
hat stays tipped like Memphis Bleek's// (What?)
Im gonna raise to tha top of tha game and tha
North Star is gonna shine upon my fame//
So get high and keep tha herb blazin until
tha bitch is out (Eternal Dazin!)//
Im neva gonna (STOP!) U wont make me (STOP!)
Ima keep flowin until tha glock pop//
I will not (STOP!) I'll never (STOP!)
Keep tha beat bangin until tha drop//
Ima keep this goin and make this cash
Afta I make enough, we'll have a bash//
It'll be my private, party started and in
our own way, we'll be departed//
If u wanna be a star, u gotta make it far
even if it means buyin out tha bar//
U gotta be a rebel at a all pro level
And when ur ready, I'll take ya to tha devil// (Yea)
If u can take heat and love fire then
go afta this hitman for hire//
Comin wit tha beat banga, tha danga
Mister glock N Kill and Masta rock slanga//
I keep a good flow up in my head but it
wont be there if I end up dead//
Competitors like to take ya out quik
until they fall down and suck ya dick//
Get down and dirty like u dirty fuckin Or
bob ur head like ur deepthroat dick suckin//
Careless and worthless ur ass is lifeless
Just like dat nigga left ur ass wife-less//
Dont be mad just be glad its better
that than a bitch bein sad//
"Mindless Self Indulgence" hold up girl
in ur stomach I see bulge-nce//
Ya'll cant make me (STOP!) I just cant (STOP!)
Ima keep flowin until tha glock pop//
He cant make me (STOP!) She cant make me (STOP!)
Keep tha beat bangin until tha drop//
Now I gotta sell rocks to handle my biz
U know 2much info as it fuckin is//

Drop that bitch!...

Stop!...

[music fades]

Pretty damn good...you got talent, dawg. Yo, check out my song plz...

"Real Life" -Gangsta One
"Go Gangsta on the Bitch" -Gangsta One feat. MC-CM R-Ryder

Yo, feedback would help alo'. Thx.

Yo, could you check out ma battle to?

lyrical_tactix VS. Gangsta One: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...=threadid=62681

thx dawg.

Thanx for ya comment. More Feedback

tight shit, u got talent, ppl should vote on ur battles, also work on some of ur lines they don't flow alwayz.......

If u can take heat and love fire then
go afta this hitman for hire//

you should have added a lil more to those lines to make it flow, but overall it kicked ass. tight! read over that section in your flow.

Yea true I just rapped it out loud and noticed a lil sumthin missin. So Ima fix it up. Lataz.

"poppin caps in yo ass" rhymes are old man, that wasnt too bad but try to bust somethin fresh. i think ive heard every way you can bust a cap, pop a cap or use their glock 9 in the book

That was anotha sic drop from you killa, you got ILL talent dogg

I agree with Jedi Soul. I think the whole thug mentality thing is dead in the water. Come with something a little more creative than poppin' glocks, dope slangin', and bitches on your dick (Which was mentioned three times in your rhyme, by the way). You got skillz. No doubt. Just use a little fresher concept... Peace.

find different ways to say what your doing so its not redundant

and do a collab with all the other killas from the sixties for kicks
shits and giggles that are blind deaf and crippled.......

Y'know, ya right. But its what i brought up around a lot in my life and shit. But im not worried about rapbattles.com right now. I got better things to worry about. Like sum personal shit that happened...

just one question, when you rhyme or spit do you do it slow like biggy? If not, than you ain't got no flow unless that beat is really slow or fast or some shit.

It goes slow (I guess u can say dat). If u heard it, u might now what beat im talkin bout.

the song is hot...the beat is hott...and you flowed perfectly to it... this shit was firre
8.7/10
peep my piece featuring rythmic tendicies called 110%raw remix

aight. thanx for tha comment also.