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Content 07-03-03 08:17 PM

"Lil Off My Chest...Rather Simple"
 
I Got Mad Flows And
Even If Your Rainman
Was Jesus You Couldnt
Fuc With These Shits Flippin
Proposals Nervous I Plan To
Rain And Shine Deliver
Sickness Daily Like A Postal
Service Drainin Flows Like
Kitchen Sinks For Oceans
Mornng To Evening So Read
A Book And Find God In A Cell Block
Behind Bars When Im Speakin
Dont Shake My Hand Say Whats Up
Or Call Me Dunn Till Im Finished
Leavin Someone With An Absetmind
Speech Passified Until The Day I
Stand Corrected My Main Objectives
Readin Your From Front To Back Even
Peepin The Worthless Classifieds
And Burnin It All For The Fact That I
Dont Like You Perhaps You Just Stoped
Askin Why Find A Fix To Kill Time Until
You Dont Exist....Keep Your Days
Out My Week I Leave A Light Bulb
Diminished Demented No Whisper
No Flicker Flows Free Flamethrower
Games Over To Hell I'll Send It
Fuck You Im Finished

~Content~

varentao 07-03-03 08:46 PM

Now this is you at your best, conte...(hey, that's Italian!)..

...venting using your own slightly cryptic and complex way. Making the reader dig into your emotions that though are apparent, the details need to be found.


Oh, admin thing might be a simple mistake. New rules being implements, things a bit shakey.

You see, post one piece a day max. And only have TWO pieces on the front page at any one time.

Unless someone else replies to a piece on the third page or something, whilst you have two already on the front. You see, then the human touch comes into play. All three are left open...


..resp...

Fierce Shadow 07-04-03 12:09 AM

thats nice dawg

Fierce Shadow 07-04-03 12:52 AM

I like your lines maybe I should try poetry

Content 07-04-03 01:15 AM

Couldnt That All Have Been Put Togeher
For One Meaningless Reply....

Only A Fuccin Thought

Content 07-04-03 01:52 PM

Thanks For That...If You Think Somethings Good Let Him OrHer Know If They're Taking The Time To Do The Same For You

shiznit 07-04-03 03:26 PM

Shiznit's Thoughts:

hey didnt you post this on open mic too??

anyways..

very creative...the flow of the piece was interesting
and the fact that you used implemented vocabs that made ut piece stood out...some lines really caught my eye tho...and its a good title too...props for that


well bout the whole admin thing...better watch a little..cuz yeah this was cleaned up and were trying to organized it maturely as much as possible...

nice drop tho...keep em commin!

The End 07-04-03 04:20 PM

Why you making a title like this? Don't do that again and I don't even remember what it is you are talking about. If you have a problem with something PM me. DON'T put it as the title of your open mic. :rolleyes:

Content 07-05-03 02:41 AM

Sorry Admin

LaDy TrInItY 07-05-03 02:56 AM

hmm..so much anger...hmm...i dont think this was my fav from you..hmm...all the guys in my life have so much anger...God bless

Content 07-05-03 09:13 PM

Good That I Made Ya Think For A Quick Minute
Thanks For Loking And Not Really Replyin Though

LaDy TrInItY 07-06-03 02:52 PM

sorry...have a lot on my chest right now...can't really read and think straight...spiritual probs...but i'll talk to you about it latah...your one of my guys...ya know that...much luv..God bless..1..

Content 07-11-03 01:45 AM

NO Im not..thanks for replying though
love ya like a cold sore miss dont bother

Content 07-21-03 03:44 PM

Once Again..to those who looked over..thank you peace out


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