[3] 13th Disciple vs [14] Addlib
 

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Topic The Poorest Man

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..................Makin it hard fo me,
Checkin in, G'luck 13.

[The poorest man]
This morning I watched from a far the poorest man standing.
Lurched and Leaning,
the man looked as training wheels were needed to balance both feet beneath him!
His face was grim, his stale smell polluting the air like a decaying limb.
His saddened face in the cold wind, his life destroyed from one stupid whim.
The mistake of a successfull young man,damned his fate forever.
His forgetfullness overcame his clever now they'll never be together.

[The start of the downfall]
It was there honeymoon, there happiness rising lika a meteorological balloon.
Allnight dancing in the ballroom, they never knew there joy would end so soon.
As they made there way back to their luxury room, they kissed and cuddle all the way to their doom.
She laid on the bed while the man went to the bathroom, he turned on the tap's for the bath.
Then All of a sudden the phone rang........it was the secruity staff.
*Theres a parcel for you a reception mr. Mcgrath*
*Thankyou i shall be down str8 away give me a minute and a half*
He leaves the suite, the woman then deceides to give her look a tweek.
Enters the bathroom not noticing the tap, she grabs her curling iron.
Plug's it in and starts to do her hair in the style of a miyan........

[Easy Mistakes]
Now it's been 3 and a 1/2 minutes, and the tubs starting to overflow.
Drips on the flor turn to small waterfalls and the puddle starts to grow.
Edging its way towards the lead that the man forgot to repair.
The outlook was looking bleek,
as she sat on the floor it seemed the wire is what the water seeked.
it flowed over the wire creating a spark, the woman turned and screamed...........
and all went dark.

[Realisation]
The man had collected his parcel and was walking at quick pace back.
Got to the door opened it up, then took one step in and collapsed.
in shock and awe the scene he saw gave him a heart attack.
Woken up in hospital and was told the news they said it was accident.
so he was never accused, but deep down inside he new that he caused the event.
And for the rest of his life he let it torment, and so began his descent.
into the emotional discontent of a love never spent.........

Spoken
*This is the poorest man,
because to have lost a love is more expensive then anything material.
and to have been purpose of that loss is emotionally
impossible to overcome.

aiight....my bad it took so long to drop......i've been dealing wit things.......but lets do this.......


The Poorest Man


He was a descendant....a Heir.....of a financially wealthy fam/born
into this world rich and secure...no reason to even give a damn/
his bloodline already chosen his plan....in the beginning of his
birth he was surrounded by helpers that his father bought/private
tutors and the desire of greed was the ways that he was taught/
the heart was in motion to rot.....his best friend was a deceased
man named Benjamin....his lover was himself/began to find
pleasure in peasants struggling to maintain wealth/laughin at the
sick but enjoying his health....beggars askin for alms to help find
ease for their permanent ailments/but refusing and shooting them
down with hurtful words that goes deeper than accidental
impalements/showed no mercy to others laments......used women
for sex, would play with their emotions then leave them broken
and shattered/on drunken binges would find homeless men and
leave them more abused and battered/many feared him and
scattered.....he was a powerful individual, and the power went
strait into his dome/bout out lower peoples land just for pleasure
in destroyin there homes/evilness dwelled in him and succombed.
....but death was an object in which he couldn't control/one night
during a stupor he was mugged and killed from a nigga out on
parole/his spirit wasn't sterile.....his dirty soul transcended from
his body and traveled towards perdition/his plentiful wealth on
earth couldn't pay no one to stop for intermission/a dream he
was hopin and wishin.....but reality soaked in when he felt his
flesh shed and his bones begin to burn/WHY LORD! was what he
was screamin and knowledge couldn't soak in and discern/now
a permanent hell intern.....so happened as time passed Jesus
himself came to hell for a temporary visit/the man said 'Lord help'.
....Jesus said no.....the cat start screamin 'why?'...including
*explicit*......*explicit*/the Lord said 'mercy u missed it'..........
remember on the world u was rich but u was really the POOREST
MAN/ur spirit lacked love from feeding my children to lending a
helping hand/think back about my child Sam......the beggar u
abused but now is up above dwelling in eternal riches/cured of
all his diseases and delivered free from all his stitches/ur soul
carried many glitches....now suffer as u caused many people to
suffer from ur greediness/'I am the Lord thy God........I'm Out......
I will never respond to u requesting neediness.......


*the man begins screaming as the light from Jesus starts fading
away*

*a demon comes and tortures the man more*






*more painful screams*






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ok this was another great matchup.....

both were great topicals......
but i liked addlibs more..... he flipped it.... 13 came with exactly what you would think of for "the pooest man"...... i like when people flip it because it makes the topical more interesting

vote = addlib

vote on mine vs mystik mind

and since everyone is so concerned only about there battles.......
let me up this...............................

ight... i respect both's ability to drop good topicals so i came back to hit this up
both were on topic... nicely done by both
i normally like 13th's topicals way more than his oponents.. but addlib got this
i like the twist from the topic... it was well done n i just felt it more
nothin takin away from disciple cuz it was good

vote=addlib

both crew.....Props to both of u...but i see this totally different.i thought both stories could have been played out better....(just my opinion)....Add i liked yours but i thought it just came out very simple....(remeber its only an opinion) 13 alot better vocab and the way u put your rhymes in....and i thought the story was justa bit better than add so this I say...

vote=13

Let me say this, I love it when someone flips a topic real well, and I saw Addlibb do this very well. Everything else was pretty equal, flow, vocab, all that shit.

Vote= Addlibb

imma go for 13, you both matched up vocab and imagery word for word...but i was simply liking 13th Disciple's more...nuf said

vote= 13th Disciple

nice battle. people have gone from abuse stories to hell stories. this league comes in phases lol.

Addlibb: Originality was off the hook. I would never have seen that storyline for "the poorest man" and I think that was really dope. Your flow was off, and you didn't seem to take much time with wording, there wasn't much wordplay either. It was still nice tho.

13-damn. You had some really nice imagery, and some cool wordplay, but I'm still trying to figure out why Jesus would visit hell. Were you on crack? lol, just playin man. I liked the riches to rags theme, and I liked your description of how evil the dude was.

vote-Addlibb
The originality took it.
Peace

i can't believe this was all the votes on this battle......RB is slowing down.........whats really good?............................

[14] Addlib beats [3] 13th Disciple




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