[5] T Square vs [12] Sand
 

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Topic Behind The Door

In. Wtf Is With This Topic.
You Topic Choosers Are Gay. ;)

Oh heavanly no, I'm battlin sand, jus on a personal note, when this started you said you expected nothin
from me, Could I prove you wrong here???? Behind the door, a difficult topic indeed....
Checkin in....
T-

Yo jus for tha record, I'm gonna spit like two hours late tonight,
I gotta work late and my phone jus got turned back on///
Peace
T-

i'm posting tommorow.

sorry. i just lost my whole

verse and it was dope

so i'm mad.

BEHIND THE DOOR
 

(TRY TO FOLLOW THIS HERE, MOSTLY 1st PERSON PERSPECTIVE)

The Intro)))
I been followin our next contestant for the last five years/
I know everything about Pete, wants needs loves an fears/
He walks around confused but appears his minds clear/
Jus watching Pete walk around aimlessly on this sphere/
He really wants to be rich or an actor but must end-ere/
Gettin nailed by this tractor with a label of john deer/
The Awakening)))
And I see groggy eyes look up at me glazed/
Lifetimes flashed over a coma of eight days/
Pete you aint passed away you look amazed/
Your the next player on my little show today/
You ask who I be well thats jus a lil mystery/
Most call me Mr. D cause I can do good deeds/
So with a smile and a wave I say" yo pete you wanna play"
An pete grins an blurts "fuck it I'm here anyway"/
Now befor we go I think you should know my boss aint here today/
You could wait but contimplate cause I know tha rules of tha game/
An pete says "Fuck it man if you call tha shots it'll turn out tha same/
I think petes so passive its a shame, then shout "Lets start tha game/
Behind The Door)))
Now as you see there seems to be three entrances from the floor/
One red one blue one white an you win whats Behind The Door/
Now befor you choose you should know what to do/
Pick two of the three and I will explain to you a clue/
"Red"
Well thats money power and respect to fulfill all your dreams/
New friends new jobs but same knowledge of peoples schemes/
"Blue"
Well thats really more of tha same in your life an little will change/
From your religious views its range could make you feel a lil strange/
"White"
Ha Ha Pete you thought you could get tricky/
Its time to choose so you should be picky/
The Choices)))
Well you've got three choices, jus look inside an listen to the voices/
I watch this man look from blue to white/
then to red an think "that shit would be tight/
A smile crosses my lips knowing whats instore/
An flames erupt from under as he looks behind the door/
Pete falls down fast an looks up one last time/
An sees not a show, but these Pearly lines/
"These were the gates, and the end cause you didnt make it my friend"/
"You let me controll you and your eternal fate jus because you wouldnt wait"/
"I am indeed Mr.D or the devil for short" I scream as pete hits hells floor/
"And now its a million years or more wonderin if it could have been avoided/
Without going Behind the Door"/

Fin
50 bars keyed in about an hour
( I already know I'm gonna get some speculation about this, but in short God was
the real host and the devil had Pete who was neutral good/evil tricked cause god
was out an the white door was heavan)
(some dumb ass is gonna ask me how could god be out for a day, well
jus look at the global state of affairs)
T-

behind the door.

another day in the life, driving herself to work
it seemed same as the night, crying in the hurt
dying or disturbed, the light was red as blood
and the life she lived was already dead to some
she read the front, but the book of life grows
so instead she'd run, a page turner was it? no.

a red light.....

the same as a dead life, stopped silence, why?
for an escape she closed the doors to her mind
the back of her eyelids seen through her eyes
bottled up inside, like a genuine vintage wine
then she used the opener and came out the sleep
this moment in time should have been unshowed
she screamed at the baby carriage rolling in the road
impulses couldn't grow, her foot on the gas didn't move
and the green light made the motion a simple groove
the wheel flew off, and left on the window a shoe
"God? what in the world did i do?" is it through?
the skies weren't blue, and the clouds didn't pass
mother earth was you, the umbilical cord sat in the grass
but this baby was gone, and no spectator could ask
police roped of the scene, irony, were together at last...

weeks or so passed, months and years, and the wish
attention...why in the world didn't she open the door for him
it sored her whims, controlled her sins, but bored her friends
what couldn't they get? live? how, when she just killed a kid
it spilled the sick, buckets of the clouds, sent them right down
the drops of unity smashed the ground and died with a frown
sigh at those sounds, but now she must move on, find herself
and see through the feelings that so often blind her health
try to help, scream, she started the car while living in the mirage
help her, please!, she turned up the radio, not opening the garage
what's she on? the music raged "

".....remember me, even when i'm gone"

all along, was this meant to be the end of the road die right here?
her mind started fuzzing and she could she the blinding real clear
trying to fight fear she couldn't punch her energy was weakened
the end, not another day, not a thought, not an hour or a weekend
she fell to the place opposite of sleepless, lost her breathe and mind
she had a dream that she was in her position with that baby behind
her seat, to think this shit, and she couldn't wake up, ready to die
but the wind blew the garage door down and she survived.....


thank you mother earth...;) we love you

ok ill kick this off with my vote...Sands was nice, i like the way it was set up and spit...

T-Square i didnt like urs too much

vote= Sand

okay. Here we go. This was closer than I thought it would be.

T-Square-Your verse was really fuckin cool. It was really strange too, and the concept was hard to grasp. You had some nice metaphors in there. I didn't understand it very well until the explaination at the end.

Sand-Your verse was fucked in the goat ass. It was incredibly weird. I understood the story, and the twists, but your wordplay was just so irregular, it almost freaked me out. The umbelical cord lies in the grass? wow, that was dope. Fuck, it was wicked.

vote-Sand
Peace

Re: BEHIND THE DOOR
 

best topical battle of this round, seemed to have brought out the best in both. . T-Pound came a lot better than I thought, and was really competitive with Sand.

However, Sand's personification and overall metaphorical values never cease to amaze me. Along with the structure and vocabulary he uses, you can only hope to catch him on an off day. .

VOTE: Sand

A question for T-Pound, though. .



Was the John Deere tractor meant to have any symbolism or connection to the story? Just wondering. . You have elevated beyond belief in the time you've spent on RB, by the way. Good Luck to both.

Let me be blunt:::
I really dont think I should be losing or have lost this battle....
Sand I will give you credit, your metas were off the hook
BUT you posted like less than 12 hours before the VOTING deadline...
And I do keep up on RB as means of elevation, but I relly dont think
that you played this story as well as me, you are jus more popular
to RB and they felt you more cause your SAND but you are also a Mod
that posted a day and a half late....I'll be honist I am a sore loser right now,
I feel like I been wronged and I hate bein outta this tournament////
Whatever happens happens, jus dont play bitch and ban me...
T=

^agrees about the deadline
if it had been some wack cat then they wouldnt have been allowed to drop late..double standards
anyway this is my breakdown
T=....ur verse was dope and very original in its concept
nice to read regardless of what folks said....i found it fairly easy to grasp what it was about...well told and some nice imagery

Sand....again a dope verse....good original stuff as well
very nice structure and great word play and imagery as well through out
like the ending alot too
so overall i gotta vote for SAND

well....i'm gonna keep voting until no more will be accepted....i'll
be blunt here.......both verses were good....but strait up...i followed sand's more....i think he came better wit the topic and all...blah blah blah....vote-sand

I Agree With 95% Of The Statements Above,
Sands Verse had A Better Story..
It Was Just A Better Written Verse..

Vote Sandy

[12] Sand beats [5] T Square


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