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Sphere of Bonded Bliss
Sphere of Bonded Bliss
Scripts typed, blood stained The passion flows cold through my veins of pain. No gain, strain arranged insane My brain splattered like paint Upon these abstract surfaces. The outlines on the pavement I can't stand to take it like lack of nourishment. I can't say that I've had much encouragement. I'd flourish rich will in rose pedal tips. We already know whether this eclipse will severe. Split leathery whips revealed unpleasantly. Slavery wasn't a choice for all of us The world is so shapeless in its symmetry. A simile directing racial supremacy Listening to the sounds of these rhythms and beats spinning. Kindling war, defending A lord of darkness maybe through our own ignorance And tolerance. Speaking, limited against the master Leaning upon the arms of disaster. Faster than a speeding bullet The world spins cocoons of deadly dancers By the pale moonlight The devil answers Quicker than the conscience generalizes its standards. At last, Century turns terror Into the common vocabulary affair... Soldier slayers we are; Desperate to fight a war to establish peace with neighbors. I'm trying to peace together... Puzzle is in a million pieces Piece by piece I ask assistance please Lord forgive us our debts As we forgive our debtors Whether they be alive or deceased. No climate this vile Has released such a beast of atrocity. No system is perfect...many religions You've heard it...it's not an isosceles. In crime we weep, Time depletes Lines defeat my weaknesses. With rhyme elite Climb defeat At the rate of sleeplessness. The kind seem weak But I rep One secret To how this madness finishes. -Dedicated to the new vision of overcast. -addlibb |
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very cool, i couldn't quite understand or get the rhythm right, but I think i felt it, rhymes are there, i think they would rhyme better when they are said, nice work
peace |
Quite brilliant actually...
Went off once or twice. But to be frank, didn't matter much. Just that as i was reading it, towards the middle of the end, it didn't fit in with the brilliance of the piece. But yeah, overall. It flowed effortlessly. The raw power and on the edge writing style really got me into it. The subject and meaning constantly being explored... ...noithing else to say, man... ..resp... |
Thanks varentao, much appreciated
..pz |
Yo Can i get some feedback plz.
zzz |
Why does every1 sleep on good pieces........dam
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