True Love
 

to lady trinity =)


My words are spoken of a love so true
sang to the song of her name i must do
far from me--my love sometimes seem
really only within me in every dream
distance apart yet we are one
where imagination ends--our lives begun
my moment of loneliness has adjourned
our drama of uncertainty has taken a turn
splendid--as all must say
destiny is a must in every way
perfect because two hearts born the same
as passion burns our eternal flame
even without sight or touch
we know we are US ever so much
with only a dream--sure we are
with all our great magic--no fantasy lie far
forever is what were made to be
together is how well reside with glee
more divine than the skies, moon, or sun
for she shall be the one i love without end
the love of true soul mate, lover, and friend

aww..*tear*....wow...baby i'm impressed!! hmm..no wonder why ur my man...the deep connections..lol..nice ....wheres varentao to critique this like he always does..lol..nothing but love..much luv..God bless..1..

Real nice work nick.. when i came here not too long ago...i introduced myself to the first good writer i saw...and it happend to be your girlfriend....she showed me this peice...and i was moved...nice use of words...and imagery...hope to see more of your work on here
One
ShorteRoc

good piece....you are lucky to have her...and it looks like u realize that...lol...best of wishes for u two...
Peace

Heh, i'm here, i'm here...

..getting too old, harder to get around, walking stick required, slower...ya know?!


To the piece

So nicely put. Sweet, cute yet also a bit more than that. It had a kind of moving depth. Imagery used was so nice too. I got no criticism for this piece, because it's dedicated to someone and it's one that is so heartfelt (or so it seems). And well, what flaws can one pick out for a piece like this

...but yeah, nice to see Trinity has linked herself up with a writer such as yourself. Could be an explosive combination writing wise (and otherwise too i guess..)...

..resp..

lol..thanx much