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LaDy TrInItY 07-09-03 12:23 PM

Just a quick piece..(tryin to get back in tha game)
 
Mc's playin games like my life is monopoly.
If you a playa then don't get caught with me.
Cuz I aint hate childish acts i'll catch you up.
I've had enough no one knows tha meanin love.
So what you sayin that I'm tha one wuteva yo.
Tha only one playin so learn how to catch and throw.
Learn how to take a blow and then let blood flow.
When tha light shines on you ya face turn white as snow.
Like a kid with his hand caught in tha cookie jar.
You far from par livin ya life like a sports car.
In tha fast lane but got too many crashes.
I'm not disgrunteled so don't say i'm back lashin.

WORD~PERFECT 07-09-03 12:26 PM

NOT BAD AT ALL SOME PLACES LAGGED BUT YOU MADE UP FOR IT I GIVE THE THUMBS UP

LaDy TrInItY 07-09-03 12:29 PM

yea...i haven't dropped an open mic piece in sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooo long..lol..figured gotta throw myself back out there somehow

Savory 07-09-03 09:01 PM

this was okay....you'll get back in ya game sooner or later....just keep droppin

latin nick 07-10-03 12:49 PM

yo sexy

shiznit 07-10-03 03:35 PM

^^^wtf is up with that??? u better read the rules before u drop one of those deadly one liners....*Shakes head*

but anyways...this wasnt bad at all lady...i liked ur poems more tho...but yeah like u said...u havent dropped anything in a long ass time.....maybe this was just a sorta coming back practice ya kno...its short but u got stuff in there to keep up reading...

nothing much else to say..but i wanna read more drops...either poetry or open mics...better throw em out here..

nice job gurl

~RuThLEss~ 07-10-03 04:31 PM

SICK Shit Lady TRINITY....................YA'll ILL SEDUCTION FAM could do a collabo together reppin feel me

peep Mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=64824

nice contend MA

J-Wizzle 07-10-03 05:43 PM

yo dat kinda ok

work on it u'll improve ur skills

IM 07-10-03 07:23 PM

LADY THERE WAS A FEW LINES IN THERE THAT I LIKED, BUT THE OVERALL DROP WAS ALRIGHT. JUST KEEP WORKING MA, AND I SEE POTENTIAL IN YOUR WORK SO I KNOW YOU CAN KICK ASS YA HEARD.

Crackills 07-10-03 08:58 PM

that was iight

LaDy TrInItY 07-10-03 09:29 PM

lol..thanx...yea...my boyfriend needs to stop free postin..lol...i'll yell at him for ya....God bless..1.

Genetikz 07-10-03 09:50 PM

tight verse, flow was off, but u still got potential, not bad overall i liked it...

cheak dishttp://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=64890

Black.Jack 07-10-03 11:50 PM

Hmm i was feelin it, it was okay, nothin too hot but, like vocab wise n complexity u needa do a bit of work, but the topic was good and the way you presented it was nice, summ the lines had good structure and meaning

Keep Droppin

Peace

BlUnT-MC 07-11-03 11:05 AM

what up lady.. nice... you do gotta improve a bit, but it had some nice content, work on rhyme rotation, flow basically but other than that you doin' a'ight.. n ruthless.. you already in our collab dum-fuck... lol... j/p... peace..


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