All for The Cross
 

July 07, 2003

Beat: Nas - The Cross

Chorus: 2x
You take the rap for this cross//
You break your back for this cross//
You do every single fuckin' thing but give up rap for this cross//
You're passin it off, as something you would not give up//
You still feelin' the same feelings that you love and you trust//

Verse 1:
Your name's been embossed//
and your privacy has been lost//
Your soul, written, recorded and on a plaque on the wall//
But that can't be all//
They look, and rip your shit from the seams//
Just to see what you mean//
So now they see that you're keen//
So they cop it, break they heads just tryin' to just stop it//
They wanna shut you up so they can bottle and top it//
But this the hot shit, I'm allowed to work or just finish it//
This is my mind, memories of past, current life incidents//
It's real intricate, try to understand the complexity//
And once you do, step up to the plate, come try testin' me//
I'll show you the real reason why most niggas invest in me//

(Chorus 2x)

If I ever in my life make a mark on the rap industry//
Anyone in the vicinity of sound will get up and into me//

Rhyming/Flow
This Was Weak, Most Of it Didn't Rhyme, And The Flow Was North-Sea-On-a-Windy-Day Choppy! Add Some Multis In!You Used It And Me Alot, try To Expand Your Rhyming Capabilities....2/10


Vocab/Wordplay
In Some PLaces You had Some Decent Vocab:It's real intricate, try to understand the complexity// - that line! But Up It A Little bit....5/10

Concept/Topic
Wasn't That Sure On The Topic, I Was Kinda Confused About
it...Shed Some Light: 3/10

Overall
Was Kinda Weak, But You Will Elevate, Don't Think I'm Giving You Negative Feedback Cos I'm A Hater, I Want You To improve, Catz Comments Helped Me Alot When I Was A newb....3.5/10

i agree... it was weak, but he tried, his attempt at vocab was good 4 the first 3 lines, then it started to fall apart... the flow was real choppy (lines were too short, and different syllable lengths...

ne-way take a next stab...

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=62832

^check this out.. Me V.s. Cin Laden audio battle (HOTTNESSSSS)