Last Revelationz
 

nuclear explosivez are bombin' me// astronomically shockingly// monotonously little children scream and run while they mommaz bleed//

inceneration of the Earth dissintagratin'// dissintigration of skin from da radiation on little children playin'//Chemical afterburst is penetratin'...

warheadz fall from da sky//nationz must fall when they rise// problemz arise and the only way to solve 'em is that all men will die//

this is the aftershock of men that used to be blastin' glocks// American laughing stocks smuggling weaponery past Iraq//

tragediez happen tragically// calamitiez catastropies// musclez start to dissentingrate and atrophy// it's blasphemy when everybody'z showin' apathy// those not in bomb shelterz end up as casultiez in explosionz of nuclear power plant factories//

therefore causin' spontaneous combustion,the eruption-of-humanz//
buildingz in major cities turn to dust-in-da-ruinz//

ashes to ashez// nuclear chain reactionz// subtraction of global factionz// the end of da world is close at hand causin' da end of man and time'z elapsin'// poisin gassez and fumez inhaled destroy da massez//

nationz are left in desolation// children cry out in desperation// no reperationz are made for all da slayed in these last revolationz// estamationz of da death toll continue escalatin'// toxic fumes preventing resperation make it difficult for exhalation// desperate nationz... try to find help in shelterz// people run around da streetz but even under ground you find yaself surrounded by heltah skeltah...

this is some shit I wrote back in the day (like 2 yearz ago) that I just found...holla with feedback

Sick vocab... mabye a little to sick. The average person wouldn't get half the shit you said... but I thought it was ill. Peace...

thanks for the feedback dunny...still uppin' for repliez

holla with the feedback kidz...

Yea You Had Sick Vocab There, Alotta People Wouldn't Get This Without A Dictionary!

You Had Killa bars Here, Lotta Revelation Shit In Here,"inceneration of the Earth dissintagratin", Etc...., Brutal Stuff...

Overall: 8/10, Was Tight, But Coulda Been Bit more Structured, You KNow?

(P.s)I Don't Usually Ask, But can You peep My Piece - "HOld Me Back" It's Been Sleeped On Like Crazy!

^^^ yes I agree that it could be structured a little betta but this is one of the few written piecez that I would post online...that meanz that when I wrote it it was designed to be an audio piece... I didn't really concentrate on structure cause I was more focused on how to spit it...

and yeah...I'll peep ya piece...

still uppin' for feedback...

come on kidz...don't sleep...

wake the fuck up!!!!!!

yo dawg yo shit was ill,, killa vocab and good lookin on the post u did on my shit tell niggaz to peep me out its gettin slept on
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^^^thanks for the feedback y'all...good lookin' on the repliez...