Im Juss tryin to be me
 

let me introduce myself in da mic/2hot4tv shy nigga ridah nigga specially in the night/u gotta knife/i aint neva scared/i got a 9 plus i got hommies everywhere/see me, ima simple man/freestyle,normal man/ always eatin wit my 2 hands/Damn!... is what i get when im rappin/i know that im wack.but who most to be forgotten/niggaz need to start somewhere/got myself high in high school told the teacher if he want some/got some/shot some/bullets faster than when u try 2 look at me,im gone/if im wack u a Freethrow shooter actin like SHaq/and im important 2 da game like kobe for the lakers/DOMINICAN PRIDE u nothin but a faka/



1, tell me what u think about, and what should i change to b betta DONT HATE ppl

yo common dogs post somethin

yo so yall aint posting nothin

decent drop, kinda elementary, but u'll elevate, just a tip, gangsta lyrics don't usually get much applause here, people are skeptical, think your fake or something, but decent drop

yeah there are two things completely bad about this:

1. Your Format
from now on//
Wirte your lyrics in//
This Format//
Cuz Its so much easier//
to read//

2. ^^Hes Right Gangster Lyrics Dint Get Any Recignition On This Site, If Ya Want An Example Of What Flys Around Here Peep my Song "100 Proof" "Broken Promises" or If You Want A Diss Track Peep My Latest Drop, But Dont Post Anymore Gangster Lyrics Aight?

Take My Advice Over Any New-b...Ive been Around For A While

Re: Im Juss tryin to be me
 

1, tell me what u think about, and what should i change to b betta DONT HATE ppl [/B][/QUOTE]

how do u expect us to help you then?

agreed with above... your lyrics are a little simple and your concept (9's and gangsta shit)is played out... Keep working at it and it will only get better with time...

gangsta is hot in past tence not in present but you showed talent even in the most basic of deliveries read this to yourself see if it develops its own personality or if it uses yours then you will see what can be refined.this was a start now finish it in a way that you could amaze yourself in.

you have flow, and stick to topic, but gangsta rap's only really good 4 a laugh, there is a deeper side to it, but shit like I got hommies amd I got nines... dawg, no-one cares, I got a snub 22 an' a baretta 9 mill, pluss a mad crew, but you wont find that shit in most my raps, 'cause no-one cares as I said.... other than that work on your vocab an' your topic structure... peace, peep my shit..