Lil Somtin For My Gtrls Peep It Out(especially The Real Ladies)
 

IT SEEMES AS IF I WAS IN A WORLD OF NOTHING BUT FALSE THINGS WHEN U CAME TO ME/
WHILE YOUR REALNESS WAS LIKE A SOUL TOUCHING MELODY THAT YOU SANG ME/
LOVES SEEMS TO BE A TOPIC THAT ISNT PERFECTED BY MOST MEN/ BUT I UNDERSTAND WHAT U NEED FROM SCOURING UR HEART FROM WITHIN/
I KNOW YOUVE GIVEN SO MUCH TO ONLY OF BEEN LET DOWN/
AND FOR U, I CAN ONLY HOPE AND PRAY THAT LUV WILL BE BETTER TO U NEXT TIME AROUND/
BECAUSE IF ANY ONE WAS TO SAY THEY TRUELY KNOW U, THEN THEY SHOULD KNOW THAT U DERSERVE IT/ YOU DESERVE THE BEST BECAUSE ONLY THE BEST DESERVES AN ANGEL THAT PERFECT/
I CAN ONLY HOPE IN THE FUTURE THAT ILL BE THE ONE YOU THINK ABOUT AT NITE IN UR BED BEFDORE U CLOSE UR EYES TO SLEEP/ AND THAT WE CAN KEEP EACHOTHER STRONG IF ONE WAS EVER TO GET WEAK/
I SWEAR IF I COULD HAVE ONE WISH GRANTED IT WOULD BE FOR ME TO BEABLE TO PROTECT U TO THE END/
BECAUSE IN THESES HOTTEST MONTHS OF THE YEAR I HAVE TRUELY MET A FRIEND/

uppin for posts come on yall whats going on...give some feed back

umm im not a real ladie im a nigga but i like this piece, i hope ya girl liked it too it seemed heart felt, 1luv.

Didn't need to be in all caps.

But it's a heartfelt piece that had your emotions imprinted on it in an inconsitent and raw way.

...resp...

Yeah, this was inspired and well written, but next time, bro, drop your caps. They made it a bit too hard to fully take it seriously.

Shiznit's Thoughts:

very self explanatory...jsut the emotions thrown in it made this one called a piece.

the vocab usage and the flow never work together but the fact u tried to maintain it as it is its quite good..

the caps blinds ppl...seriously not a very appealing factor...cuz when u use caps many ppl would gone dizzy and just not read it at all..but oh well...it had an interesting theme..not at all bad