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daddy why did you do that to mommy/
you said if we hit somebody we're supposed to say sorry/
but you never say sorry daddy, you yell now/
why did ou tell that man that mommy just fell down?/
mommy didn't fall down, daddy's lying/
mommy why are you always sad and always crying/
daddy why are you always mad you always fighting/
why do you always say I'm bad even when I'm trying/
No I don't want to go to my room/
I don't want to go to bed now, I want to be with you/
I don't want to, daddy it's too early/
I didnt' mean it daddy I'm sorry, I'm sorry/
I promise I"ll never ever say that again/
I'm sorry daddy please don't hit me again/
please, I'll be a good boy now/
don't put me in the room, please don't turn the lights out/
...what did I do?/
I'm sorry daddy that's all I want to say to you/

damn....so much depth captured with such little effort...the "daddy" "mommy" thing really made the piece more powerful..making it seem like its really coming from the mind of a young child witnessing all this and not knowing wat to make of it.....definately liked this....
LP

ayo, thanks for the love....anyone else feeln this or what? if you ain't, let me know...peace

wow this touched me... nice written
the mommy and daddy really spoke to me too... it made the poem just a lil more powerful
nice one