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Quik-$pit 07-14-03 07:50 PM

I'm Still Waitin For You !
 
I Cant Wait Forever

I cant stay feelin like this, your drivin me crazy doin this ...
Flash backs of our last kiss, make me cry and fall to bits ...
I wanna be able to sleep but cant reach the off switch ...
all this shit has left my broken heart with a nervous twitch ...
Just come back to me and stop with the "i'm not ready" buisness ...

You have put me on a lock and threw away the key ...
In a tiny little cell with just a pin hole that i can hardly see ...
just a room of memories an a man that was once me ...
i love you but i hate you for what you've done to me ...
Just please go and find the key, return an set me free ...

free from pain free from sorrow and free from death ...
all i want now is for my neck to feel your breath ...
without you in my life you know i have nothing left ...
except for a few photo's and that straw i kept ... < The straw thing is a long story
with you i feel blessed, but its been days since i last slept ...

sleepless nights thinkin about what i'll do ...
what shall i do to prove how much i love you ...
my mind cant change subject its stuck on you like glue ...
do have any clue about the pain your puttin me through ...
you said we'll get back but i'm still waitin for you !!!!!!!!!!!!
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Some advice / feedback please !

Thanx

Left Standin 07-14-03 08:10 PM

I like how you can keep posting on the same subject yet..It's always hot..I hope you show these to ol' girl you talkin about and not letting them go to waste just for our viewing.

Da NFamous 07-15-03 06:00 PM

i like to review every poem i read but this one i got mixed feelings about this shit i think it was kinda too easy and bleh while at the same time deep, u didnt mesh the simple complexity well and i think that was the biggest turn off and also if the straw is so detailed and important then it should have been more incorporated in the poem, 1luv.


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