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Spit4One 07-14-03 11:09 PM

Please peep...are you feeling it?
 
daddy why did you do that to mommy/
you said if we hit somebody we're supposed to say sorry/
but you never say sorry daddy, you yell now/
why did ou tell that man that mommy just fell down?/
mommy didn't fall down, daddy's lying/
mommy why are you always sad and always crying/
daddy why are you always mad you always fighting/
why do you always say I'm bad even when I'm trying/
No I don't want to go to my room/
I don't want to go to bed now, I want to be with you/
I don't want to, daddy it's too early/
I didnt' mean it daddy I'm sorry, I'm sorry/
I promise I"ll never ever say that again/
I'm sorry daddy please don't hit me again/
please, I'll be a good boy now/
don't put me in the room, please don't turn the lights out/
...what did I do?/
I'm sorry daddy that's all I want to say to you/

Izz 07-14-03 11:55 PM

whoa that was creepy but pretty good

PD 07-15-03 12:04 AM

This rhyme was actually going somewhere, then it just started rambling off. I could feel the emotion. Keep working at it and make a few more lines... I'd like to actually see how this would turn out if it was a little longer.


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