Last Job...emotional good read
 

sorry this is very long, but its well worth the read i think

I've been given the job for the thousandth time
Never been a problem commitin this crime
Except this one, didn't know what was the matter
Like all the others, I was to make the brains splatter
The gun was set, target in place
I just couldn't hit that sweet little face
Pressure gettin to me, hands gettin sweaty
"Fuck man what you doin", Don't worry I'm ready
Lookin into the scope, I see her face, makin my heart race
Everythings in place, she's insight, I can't miss I'm an ace
Take one more look, I can't finish the job
I don't know what's the prob

I tell the guy who hired, that I may as well be fired
To all assasins out there, I was the one they admired
I can't do this particular one, and Imma retired
He says thats fine, and bids me my farewell
And tells me he'll know where I dwell
Gunna see me again one night
That never a good sign....months and years pass to my delight

Got a wife and kids now, settled down, a happy father
A normal job, normal salary, normal life, that does not bother
Walkin down the street I saw her
the same girl from years ago who I could not complete
I wanna talk to her, feelin the heat, yet do not retreat
I see a bond between the two of us
Automatically feel a sibling trust

Back at home, sittin watchin the TV, when the house is stormed
A circle of men around me with guns pointed at my head is formed
The man walks in and says "Told ya we would meet again"
He leaves me alone with all these men
They get ready to fire, bullets from all directions
Entering my body in all different sections

At the funeral, I can still see the people, and she is there
The sweet little face, wearin all black, crying, many tears
I finally see the bond, she's my sister
Long lost, never knew her, missed her
Glad I didn't complete the job
Have a good life, please don't sob

uppin c'mon people dont sleep on this

Actually....wasn't that long
This was a pretty enjoyable piece to read. Liked the whole concept, presented nice imagery and a good rhyme scheme.
Near flawless, some really small touch ups couldv'e helped but this was a hot track.
9/10

PURE DOPENESS KID! I WAS FEELING THE WHOLE STORY LIKE A SHORT BOOK, AND I WAS ANTICIPATING THE END. IT WAS NOT TOO LONG, IT WAS LIKE YOU SAID WELL WORTH THE READ SON. UPPIINNN!

hey guys thanks for the comments, much apreciated...yah I look at it and it's not that long, just when I was writing it seemed longer

uppin this...don't sleep on this shit...feedback, drop a link for somethin you want me to check out

i was feeling the whole script AVE
nice piece
dopeness

Tight verse i was feelin ya kid..nice flow and good rhyme scheme..my fav linez..dont know why..but i liked 'em they kinda flowed good are those 2

the same girl from years ago who I could not complete
I wanna talk to her, feelin the heat, yet do not retreat

^ nice linez..good pieace keep spittin kid

aight thanks alot for the comments peeps, sounds like this was a good piece, kinda wanna do an audio for it...but dont really know how..

uppppppin this shit...drop a link and I'll check ya stuff out as well

Imma up this for the last time....drop a link and ill check your stuff out

nice drop, feelin evrything

give sum feedback please
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that was a nice spit man keep it up