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Corruption
One world leadin deception but they just too scared of rejection.//
Contraceptive must be a thing of tha pst or just a mis-conception.// Detction of girls concievin babies and droppin pills to reflect them.// Down tha toilet with out a chance to even get a tear shed.// Ya blood red through tha veins but its enough said.// Just rememba next time you lay down use protection.// Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.// You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat) Now its time to shed light upon all them "g's.// Poppin caps from car windows then gettin ready to flee.// But you too big to get on ya knees when you need.// God to help you, now is that how we real men be.// Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.// You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat) |
its a work in progress..just wanted to get feed back for this much
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That was legit. I liked this better than everything else I've read in here so far.
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hey baby...i like it it's real good and all true too. good work =) love ya
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its nice a little short but still good.
keep it up nice rhyming. 4.0/5.0 |
thanx
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yea, had a nice flow... could use some metaphores.. or some foreshadowing.. of some kind, but I like the message it sends for sure.. stray'n people off the "thug life".. keep it up
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thanx kid..i'll use tha advice
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