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LaDy TrInItY 07-17-03 09:02 PM

Corruption
 
One world leadin deception but they just too scared of rejection.//
Contraceptive must be a thing of tha pst or just a mis-conception.//
Detction of girls concievin babies and droppin pills to reflect them.//
Down tha toilet with out a chance to even get a tear shed.//
Ya blood red through tha veins but its enough said.//
Just rememba next time you lay down use protection.//

Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.//
You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat)

Now its time to shed light upon all them "g's.//
Poppin caps from car windows then gettin ready to flee.//
But you too big to get on ya knees when you need.//
God to help you, now is that how we real men be.//

Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.//
You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat)

LaDy TrInItY 07-17-03 09:03 PM

its a work in progress..just wanted to get feed back for this much

Nu-Sense 07-17-03 10:01 PM

That was legit. I liked this better than everything else I've read in here so far.

latin nick 07-17-03 11:45 PM

hey baby...i like it it's real good and all true too. good work =) love ya

Izz 07-17-03 11:45 PM

its nice a little short but still good.
keep it up nice rhyming.
4.0/5.0

LaDy TrInItY 07-18-03 10:24 AM

thanx

BlUnT-MC 07-18-03 10:39 AM

yea, had a nice flow... could use some metaphores.. or some foreshadowing.. of some kind, but I like the message it sends for sure.. stray'n people off the "thug life".. keep it up

LaDy TrInItY 07-18-03 05:07 PM

thanx kid..i'll use tha advice


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