sad story, (please read)
 

i gave you all you could need and all you could have
running away to see you and cummin home 2 my dad
gettin hit but thinkin of you it was worth it, and im glad
thinkin about u makes my chest hurt & makes me think sad
I could of cried till i died but ill held it all inside, for myself
sitting in my room holding that picture of u that lies on my shelf
everytime i think of you i feel a shiver go up my spine
then i think to myself........... David you will be fine
you used me as if i were a living soul dart board
my heart was the red in the middle & u hit me with every shot
i fought to be with you and struggled when it hurt to kiss you
now that its all over all i do now is miss you and want u here
but now im gonna live with fear of myself cuz i wont shed a tear
but now i want you to know...........the next shot you hear
was me. killing myself while lookin in a mirror with your picture

man that was felt, that was really felt

can i get some people to check this out
for me and post what yall think please
holla atcha

that shit was real deep i like it man, i know how u feel and the end line was pure dopetry many props and stay up, its a shame more people dont check the poetry forum. could u peep my piece passed rain? thanks man, 1luv.

ne1 wanna read this for me and tell me what
they think please

this man needs some people to check out his skill

dayum this pieace is.........deep

that drop was real deep, man were do peeps get these skillz

thanks ta both yall with ya feed back.............
yall jus gotta put ur all inta everything and
thats what you get is that kinda stufff i wrote
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tell me what you think people

yo i dig that, it's real. From the soul, that's how poetry should be, it's a prime example. keep it up

thanks to the people above//////////////////////////
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more always needed and i would be pleased to
read what you think

That was tight. Emotionally shit is the only way to write nice work.

aight thank playa ^^^^^^^^^^
check this out for me people

Can i get some people to peep this for me

wow very touching
keep writing straight from the heart
I really felt this... really deep