A Man's Wordz and Thoughtz...
 

this is a poem i'm writin for an opp for the speech team that i'm joinin next year. its one of those poems that dont rhyme so yea...


they say that a man's wordz and thoughtz are the same but i beg to differ. a mans wordz and thoughtz are two completely different things...yet they are two completely different things that are forever innertwined with one another. now a man's wordz are nothin more than a verbal image that is given off for others to depict them as. they range between the extremes from important seeming to pointless sounds spoken from the mouth. now, as for a mans thoughtz...that is a man at his truest, rawest, most pure form. a man can hide behind his wordz but he is completely exposed when it comes to his thoughts. a man's wordz are nothin more than a conjunction of letters that are put together to make sounds. but a mans thoughts are are his silent feelings, soundless emotions...they are the depths of his soul.......


its not quite finished but what do you think of it so far?

i really like it, its just really raw yet smooth at the same time, i really like it my only suggestion would be heightened vocab because the piece is deepit deserves deeper vocab, 1luv.

aiight...thanks for the advice man. also i'm not quite finished with it cause i'm kinda stuck at that part. i dont know if i wanna keep talkin bout the differences or if i want to start talkin about a man and his wordz and thoughtz. could i get some suggestions?

anyone else out there?

Yeah, i like what you're trying to do here.

It's written well, though i feel needs to be read over and done over at least 5 times. It has things missing here and there. Seems not quite 'there' yet. But a solid basis. Oh wait, you said itt wasn't complete yet. So it's all good.

Oh, and i dunno what kind of debate thing or whatever this is. But i'd say you subtely move onto exploring another side. Then another. Three should do it.

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thanks for the feedback and i'll move on to another part of it