"BodyGaurd"
 

This is a different topic I guess...I had written this one a while ago...for a friend...Please tell me what you think...

I will Always Stand up for you
I will do whatever I need to do
People put you down and kick you around
But I will be there to pick you up from the ground
I will never leave you empty handed
With me, You will never be stranded
I won't ever get in your way
I'll stick around to help you through your day
Standing by to always help you out
Never running away and never will i pout
Forever watching your back
And help you to gain what you lack
I will never treat You like trash
Always helping you to kick ass
Trying not to make you mad
But showing you I can be reliable and bad
I will send you all of my trust
And be there for you when I must
I can be your honest true friend
Standing by your side till the very end
Remember, Life with me will never be hard
Because I will forever be your Bodygaurd...

Note: I am in the process of recreating this one...

umm the title and very last line didnt quite match the mood of the rest of the piece but it was still a worthy peep i must say i have to be critical of its simplicity, simple poems can be good but this left more to be desired its just that essence that u didnt grasp with this one but like i sed a worthy peep i hope u get a lot of good feedback mama, 1luv.

I understand what your saying...Thanks for the feedback...and I'm going to work on this piece a little..Thanks...;)

peAce

it was simple i think honestly it could use some work so i cant ait to hear this shit after u recreate it,peace baby girl

Thanks for your honesty..Iam gonna work on it some more...but im not sure if it will be any longer..Thanks beau...

peAce

I'll stick around to help you through your day
Standing by to always help you out

~Coulda Reworded It~

Other Than That Everything Was Fine...
If You Really Are What You Claim To
Be Whatever Man Your With
Gotta Real Girl / Woman

~Content~ Say It With Me...I Know You Can

Thank you for your feedback...Iappreciate it...

peAce

it was aight needs some work but sall good nice drop keep elevatin

Thanks for the feedback...and I said earlier in another post...This one is being worked on...Thanks..:)

peAce