Grandaddy
 

everyday i wake up and look in the mirror
wipe the mist off the surface
to see my face more clearer
and then i realise that im gettin old
shit im going grey
it aint a joke no mo'
i need a name for the net and rhymes that flow
but it has to good and gangster for sho'
thinkin of names got me stressin
i wanna be a rapper
bitch i aint messin!
which ones the best?
theres such a selection!
so many good ones to choose
but i chose c-section
damn what an erection!!!
now im all set
now for the net
i posted a video which i really regret
it shows my true side
my fucked up bald head,and my saggy eyes
not to forget my messy goatee
and the fuckin shit stains all over my teeth
i thought this was a site where people just flirt
does no one find me sexy in my piss stained shirt
i admit im pushing on fifty
but that doesnt mean i cant act swifty
but im too fat
so dont try and lift me
you'll probably hurt ya back
and end up like me
gettin help from a cane when u walkin the streets
im changin my name, c-section no more
im sick of pickin grey pubic hairs off the floor
old is what i am, grandaddy for sure
im dying of old age!
fuck theres no cure
what can i do in my grandfather cap
fuck it i give up y'all
i cant rap
this shit dont work
i think i'll bury myself next to G-Buttersworth

Ekk elevate'''''''''''''
not bad but needs def. improvement

I'll pay your internet bill if you promise to delete this and never ever post at rap battles again..

Rhyming/Flow
WEak, Needs Alot of Improvment mos def. Go To The Tutorials Section And Look Up Flow n' Structure! Learn About Multi's n' INterline Rhyming! ... 2/10

Vocab/Wordplay
^REad Above^, Go To Tutorials! Almost Non-existant Here Dawg! ... 1/10

Concept/Topic
Couldn't See Any, Part From Some Hints Of Gangsta wannabe! Stop Ridin The Admins n' MOds Dicks! ..0/10

Overall
Lost Of Elevation Needed!
-Flow
-Rhyming Abilities
-Up Your Vocab
-Learn About Wordplay
-Pick a DEcent Topic
.......1/10

Word!