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Volcanic Sentiments (Raging Bull)
Mellow To Art,A Coward Of Sorts,Yellow In Heart
Feeling Of Fear Inside Beneath The Bellowing Sparks Advantage Taken From Me,Pride Stripped and Clothes Torn In My Field Of Dreams,Been Ripped Wit Vines,Pricks and Rose Thorns Promising Skills,Reluctant To Show Wit Pressure and Nerve Wreckage Even When Im 1st In Line,Still Always Get Served Second Depressing Stages Got Me Suicidal,Too Timid To Fight The War I Try To Succed In The Big Apple,While Worms n Snakes Bite The Core Role Models And Idols Are Lost While Thugs R In The Eyes Of Kids Heros Turned From Model Citizens To Co Defendants Fightin Bids Masses Hate This Figure Statured In Front Of Their Vision Doomed To Feel The Cause of my Inner Thoughts Under Collision Jaded,Fatigued And Stomach Weary Of Fruits To Nature Spoiled Flames To The Fire Rise And Rain Over The Clouds when Hate Is Boiled My Fate Is Apparent,Mind Incoherent To Peace,Past Points of Reason Taken My Enemies Out Wit Me OverShadows The Joy Of Breathing Quiet Kat,Known To Let Actions Speak Louder Than Words While Ones Who Act, Fold and Break when Taken Out Of The Burbs Mistake The Kind For Weak And Find The Faults In Assumptions Lava Like Termoil Lurks In Egos Colliding On Course,When Erupting Increase Of The Numbers Involved,While Viewers Watch Entised The Anger Inside,Hidden For Years,Exploding Now On The Mic Climax in Rage Shows,As Evidence Left From My Slain Foes and thier Withering Corpses Incorporate More Colors Then Rainbows Im The Same Joe,Average Kid,Raging Bull and I See Red Evacuate Quick Cause My Vision's Set,Everything i See's Dead Control's Gone,Maniac on The Loose And Fuck Mercy Takin On All Comers To Face This,Not One'll Hurt Me Bring The Guns and Vests,Cops,I Welcome The Pigs God Cant Save me,I'll Blast The Church and its Preists...Hell It Is I See My Death Bed and I Aint Got No Problem Sleepin On It Cause When Im Gone My Living Actions'll Forever leave the People Haunted I Lay On The Ground Defeated,My Destiny,Paid In Full 57 dead,another 40 injured,at the hands of the Raging Bull |
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Wow - That Was Small!
Rhyming/Flow Was Straight Dopeness.. You Made Mad Use Of Interline Rhyming, MUlti's. IT Flowed Right Of My Tounge..Damn...8/10 Vocab/Wordplay Every Line Had Killa Description, Killa Vocab. You EXpressed Your feelin's In Ever Bar: "Increase Of The Numbers Involved,While Viewers Watch Entised The Anger Inside,Hidden For Years,Exploding Now On The Mic" - Word, Tight...8/10 Concept/Topic Never Fell Of Once. Original Topic. LOved The Way You Ended It. It Was LIke The Rest Of The Song Built Up To That Climax, Ready To Erupt: "Lava Like Termoil Lurks In Egos Colliding On Course,When Erupting" - Building It up (nIce Wordplay There)..Then Just Exploded At the End: " Lay On The Ground Defeated,My Destiny,Paid In Full 57 dead,another 40 injured,at the hands of the Raging Bull"! ..9/10 Overall Was Dope as Fuck! Only Downside, Could've Made The Text A Bit Bigger..lol..naw, 8/10, Well Deserved - We Should Collab Some Time! Word! |
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that was great i liked it alot want toseem more
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yet another nice conceptual piece... feeling your style... get at me sometime to collab...
keep writing and exciting... peace... |
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