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LaDy TrInItY 07-26-03 12:35 AM

Whats in a word
 
Footprints in the concrete do you remember when we made them.
Your understanding just loosens because its unraveled at the hem.
Misconceptions in every aspect of your personality makes me sick.
How can u judge while your in the midst of one of your schizophrenic fits.
Im differant but you can't put your finger on what it is because your too timid.
Glazed over with fear how can you say Im the one when you always get livid.
All genius in just one mind attracted to depth that is beyond comprehension.
Inside I cry but the tears do not fall because my emotions are on a mental dentention.
Less tension in my mind when brought upon from the open minded denial.
Can't help that no one has the correct vision to see a master piece beyond trial.

ReccA 07-26-03 02:01 AM

nice drop...definately enjoyed reading it....

How can u judge while your in the midst of one of your schizophrenic fits.

^^have to say that was one of my favorite lines....flowed really smooth....hm, really nothing more to be said...overall nice piece...
LP

Content 07-26-03 02:58 AM

This Was Good....Once Again....
Flowed Well Through And Through
What Recca Highlighted From It Did
Stand Out...Dont Stop Doing This Your Talented

You Couldnt Spot Me With Laser Surgerys
Eehh....Nevermind....Overall This Was Good

~Content~

LaDy TrInItY 07-27-03 12:44 AM

thanx

DiverseSyndicate 07-27-03 09:22 PM

that tight shit boo,nice wordplay keep elevatin

bouncedoggydog 07-28-03 02:05 AM

Nice drop Trinity, keep up the good work. I like the style, flow's well. Keep elevating, you have talent for sure...

Respect...

LaDy TrInItY 07-28-03 03:18 AM

lol....i just love how everyone says the same thing...thanx for tha reply content...u've been there through everything ...even all my mood swings..lol...I dont know any one else on RB..since all these new peeps..lol...gettin old aren't we

Content 07-28-03 04:07 AM

Twenty Years Young...
Some Have Put CD's Out....
Others Have Became Uninspired....
Some Are Working On Putting A Cd Out....
Someone Will Hook You Up If They Make It...
This Someone Is Hired
Paying Bills And Rent For A House
His Works Far From Done

Take Care...Dont Worry Be Happy*

LaDy TrInItY 07-28-03 10:27 PM

uppin

Ajax 0042 07-29-03 11:07 PM

nice drop like ur work n stlye keep with the style n keep elevating once again nice drop

varentao 07-30-03 09:32 PM

This was actually one of the best pieces pieces i've seen from you in my hazy memory.

The depth was intriguing, dug shallow yet still must work to find.

The imagery was fitting. I went well what you were 'getting out'.

Though maybe over-doing certain parts. A bit more compression would probably benefit it.

But overall, a quite fine piece. I can see that within each one of your pieces there are 'masterpieces' (of 'short' poetry, which you seem to concentrate on) bursting to get out.

I think the key is compression. Because from what i can see at the moment, most of the other things are already there.

Oh, and as well as percieving another thing. I also got a little message out of it directed to some people *shuffles feet* here at RB. I am sure they know of your talent. And there has merely been a lapse in communication and overall understanding on both sides.

..resp....

LaDy TrInItY 07-31-03 07:40 AM

hmm...its directed to many people..(but yes some at RB...a lot of tha newbies)....no one comprehens me..but its all good

Verbatim 07-31-03 05:10 PM

That was really good
i enjoyed reading every line
kept me interested
keep droppin
you got lots of talent
peace,

ME AGAIN 07-31-03 07:13 PM

nice rhymes but ya poem is all over da place after" livid" u lost me it was like now who ya talking about like i said nice rhymes but subject matter is missing you got ta make it more intriguing

LaDy TrInItY 07-31-03 07:30 PM

then see..U DONT UNDERSTAND ME...sorry..to be so blunt..well not actually


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