She's baaaaaack! My new peice "Run Away"... lemmie know what cha think
 

Run away fast... as fast as you can
Before the veil of darkness leaves my hand
To knowingly let your views expand

Bringing light upon what should be covered
Destiny ruined should I be discovered
My simplistic yearnings to be your lover

So solemnly I stand, and let you rummage
Any hope of what could be quickly plummets
The pain, the tears, my soul can’t stomach

My secret I hold without the slightest camouflage
Needing you to find this openly placed entourage
I beg you please, let me keep my beautiful mirage



Just in case you guys were wondering I know entourage means crew or what not, but I looked it up an it also means
the surroundings i.e. Environment, neighborhood... so I was sayin it’s openly placed within it’s surroundings.
Didn’t want cha to think I was slow or anything... but don't be too harsh, commin outta a block I'm hopin ::crosses fingers::

~Breakdown Of Content...Make Me A Mod Comittee~

Good Imagery...Aint It Funny...

Back To Your Write..Theres Nothing Really Bad To Critique
From This...You Got Your Point Across In A Very Mature
And Respectable Manner...Proper Grammer..Propaganda
Props From Me As You Display Your Philosophy

Dealing With A Possible Breakup And Maintaining The Visions
Of Things Being Well In Your Mind Forever..A Wrinkle In Time..

Please Be Respectful Person And Reply
To Those Who Have Shown Interest In Your Work

{Anyone Who Replies To You Not Just Me..Geez}

Whats up Thunda..
I was feelin this piece a lot, simple yet heavy at the same time.

Wanting something so bad, yet being too afraid to find out if you can really have it..in fear of shattered dreams, and now empty reality..

Hit close to home for me in that aspect.
Im not exactly positive in the message you were trying to convey in this piece, but it was broad enough for me to take it for what it was to me, personally, and therefore I could really appreciate it..

Stay up girl, n keep em droppin. pz

Wow..I liked this..it was beautiful....it did have really nice vocab..and your imagery is still painting pictures in my head.

Hmm....made me think of you giving your heart to someone...then telling them ur kind of scared that they'll hurt you...but your opening yourself...and then i thought of a bird flying away from his mothers nest....i know i know..i'm weird

very beautiful...
God bless..1..

well thank you very much.. I still am unclear on half the meanings of this, I know what one secret is and it's not gonna be revealed I don't think. Part of this was about giving my heart to some one but something in me says that that's not it either... but I came back to this for a purpose... to talk to Content about his reply
I'm really not sure how you replying to my peice puts me in debt to you as far as replying to your peices... which I did read by the way. The way you act like you're better than everyone else I wouldn't want you to be a mod. Sarcasm is funny in other forums here I think remarks about some one commin to read your long ass poem and then callin them a freeposter is incredibly rude. Try being gracious. I know Ver was before he got mod... tha's why I thought he shoulda been one, because no matter what he always said thank you... So if replyin to my peice requires me reading and replying to yours I just want you to know there's no obligation... jus cause you're not a newbie doesn't mean you can be an ass...oh an you got the meaning wrong. peace

One Thing..Your Meaning May be Completely Different Than Another Persons Thundacat Thats Why Its Called Poetry....

How Do I Act Like Im Better Than everyone Else When I Acknowledge Those That Have Levels I Wish I Was On

You Have Definately Misinterpeted My Words
And Moreso Definately Dont Know Me...

Anyones Reply Should Consist Of More
Than Five Words..If You Think Different..
Thats All On You...I thought Your Poem
Was Alright And My Perception Was Different
Because I Think Different..Its Poetry

Peace

I love the wonderful editing job you've done on the first reply... that's a lot better, thanks Content... And I couldn't agree with you more about it being poetry, I perceived your tone as a bit different after reading some of the replys you had in Trinity's new peice... but like I've told you in PM's I'm done with this, unless you have some thing else you're just dying to say... psh, peace

EMOTION Thunda you really got that....Your use of vocabulary and straightforwardness are very attractive in this piece. I can only relate to what I experenced while reading your work, so it may be off your mark. I felt a sense of raw and underlying infatuation/longing for someone/something very special and dear to the subject. So close yet so far from reality, so needed yet so feared... Something that could make and at the same time break the subject, emotionaly torn between basking in the mirage of ones own fabricated outcome and that of the unknown...Will it be or should it be, a very deep and tormenting realization.... what if more damage than good is the result of changing the stake's of manifesting one's own secret desires into the realm of comon knowledge... or along those lines... If you wolve that complex struggle of emotions in a well thought out concise drop, then my hat's off to you. Great drop either way but that's what I got out of it, I can relate to it as mentioned....


And just as a note, I really think you may have misunderstood content, he's been a solid cat all across..

Respect...

Yes, i could see with this piece you were hiding many of your true feelings and thoughts. Hiding them in the way you put your words down. So the reader has to dig, and even if he/she finds something, it may or may not be what you were writing about. Heh. I do it nearly all the time.

I liked it, it was kind of short, yet compressed fairly well.

Oh, and on another note. I too think Content is just a bit mis-understood. I can see how people percieve him to come across as a bit akward. Because of the crypticism he uses when typing (that's from replies, to his pieces). And add onto that they are quite sharp at times. And he rarly conforms so as to help the reader 'understand'. Well, you get the point.

Anyway, seems to have been handled well.

Enjoyed the piece, Thunda.

..resp....

thank ya guys! Dogg... pretty much the general idea... it's like it's lying out there, I've blatantly put it out in the open, tryin to make it easy to find, but at the same time I'm afraid that more pain than anything could come from telling.... so I'm not going to put it there in front of their face. But the yearning you mentioned was pretty on point. Kinda like I had that but then my secret came and now it's kinda like it was taken away not by really anything, just knowing that there is something between us now. I don't know what my secret is... I just know it's something and it's there.

If I misunderstood then that's my bad, I do apoligize, I just felt like the comment that was made in here (before editing) added to some of the other comments that were made were rude and ungreatful twoards people replying...

It would be rather redundent for me to say anything. (I don't know what redundent actually means, but in the context I heard it from a Pinky and the Brain cartoon I believe it means pointless)

It would be pointless for me to say anything because it's all been said. Seriously. I read your peice and it was great and I knew exactly what I was going to say in the reply, cause I know I gotta reply to your material, but everyone else already said what I was going to say.

So, if you want to know how I feel, then just re-read the stuff everyone else wrote. Cause I can't really say it any better.

haha I smell ya, thanks bud... peace