B.r.e Presents:repentece
 

THIS IS A POEM I MADE IN TO A SONG I HOPE OU ENJOY

On the third day I arose-in the eyes of my foes-they
called it SUN~DAY-cause its when i cursed my enemies
with skin melon from Serbian rays-
In this time man had no color-and questioned my
father-questioned the path of a martyr-
Questioned the virginity of my mother-
They had already scared me in the physical
form-outcasted by the norm-cause I refused to
conform-placed stakes beneath my palms-given a funeral
plus wasnt embalmed-
My crown of thorns-left my soul torn-
Still screamed FATHER FORGIVE THEM FOR THEY KNOW NOT
WHAT THEY DO-I suppose he didnt hear me or maybe he
got confused-
To conclude-my blood leaked-as my tears tainted were
painted even in death they seaped-still they secreate-
where do you think rain comes from?
It was from the dehydration that sercum from the sun-
I sacrificed my life- and made man born into
strife-was it worth-or just a curse- to be born on
this earth?
Showed them the power to heal and touch-but they cant
mend a broken heart with a simple clutch-the begin is
the end-satan wins- man will never be cleansed of his
sins-
From IBLIS to DJINN-the continuim-the pendegram in the
pendulim-that man seams to
Be standin in-the hypthesis-of blasphemy- from
aerostotle plato and saukretes-
The identical crusifixtion angle in side the
isoselease- and the benediction ofreligious
entities-this wasmny fault I failed may man forgive
me-please!

uppin

good vocabulary...something that this board has a great lack of but ur vocab was on point spelling on the other hand...the piece was complex in its vocab and the way it flowed yet had a certain twist of simplicity that made the poem even more impactful. I wasnt sure wut to you would offer on a poetic level and u pleased with this piece im not into portraying myself as divine because i'm all but, however it wasnt an inept remark because it progressed the poem overall, in short...props, 1luv.

your insight is illightening me i did this because we dont study this in my religion i was asked by a christian what would i do in his shoes so i wrote just that his view