The Dream
 

woke up late at night eyes full of tears
dreamt bout somethin i thought was all cleared
was it a memory or just a dream
i'm confused my mind is in between
just when i thought i was over you
see what you did, look what i'm goin through
in the dream, me and you were together
holdin hands like everything was better
i just wanna move on with my damn life
forget about you, someday get a family and a wife

but i do care bout you still but i dunno why
even after what you did to me, made a man cry
left me outta the blue, i had no clue
i was lost, didn't know what to do
depressed for a week or two
scared, didnt know what my life would come to
i don't love you no more, atleast i don't feel that way
i just care like i cared for you during your troubling days
but hopefully it was just a dream and it didn't mean a thing
cause i don't want anything to do wit you.......not a damn thing

uppin for replies
peace

A to the point and raw piece that i can only see as right from the heart.

I can see you put a lot of your emotions into this piece. And though quite uncut and 'here and there'. It is appreciated for what it is.

...resp...

You did good writing this. Like Varentao said, it was a raw piece. I liked reading it. The first line of it drew me in. You started it out with an..emotional line, I guess. I thought that was a good way to do it.

"i don't love you no more, atleast i don't feel that way
i just care like i cared for you during your troubling days"

I like that part of it right there. Keep posting more like this.

thanks for the replies
keep uppin

plase give me some more replies

I can relate to your peice, so it pulls emotion out of me. In a simple format you expressed your torment over a person, from friend to more, back to friend, then close by not wanting any more to do with the person. I can tell you ment that, but... you are still open to that person on some level. At least that's what I got out of it. I like it, keep up the work, you might want to add some complexity into this peice, I think the message is worth it. Overall I felt this..

Good drop...

thanks
keep uppin

i agree umm ur emotion was real and and real raw i liked that stay up, 1luv.

uppin

This Was Definately Straight From The Heart
The One Thing That Made This Not Seem As
Well As It Could Be Was.....

left me outta the blue, i had no clue
i was lost, didn't know what to do
depressed for a week or two
scared, didnt know what my life would come to

~Other Words Could Hav Been Used To Possibly~
~Add More Imagery And Making It More Enticing To~
~The Readers...You Might Agree..You Might Not~
~Your Hearts Definately In This Though~

Some Of Your Words Were Just Used
Over And Over Again Througout This
Piece Which Made This Less "Reader Friendly"

Your Emotions There Without A Doubt..Elevate

Peace

I think we can all associate with such feelings at one time in our lives, I know I can, and because of that, I feel you in this piece, I relate to the emotion.. Your execution may be different to mine, but the message is the same, a good piece.